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A short piece which needs a lot of work. New sections are wanted, as well as work on transitions needed. Creating a mysterious midsection for the piece, as well as lengthening the beginning are two goals, along with the ones stated in sentence two.
Grade Level: 8
Intended For: Not Sure
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Violin, Viola, Cello.
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: Quarter = 120, will probably be slowed in the possible middle of the piece.
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
File 1: application/pdfDownload

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#4 Matt LaRocca 2016-11-15 10:05
Actually, disregard going into the "edit" part of your piece to find the file. It shows right up in the thread.
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#3 Matt LaRocca 2016-11-15 10:02
Hi Ben,

No worries that you don’t know a lot of theory! It won’t stop you at all.

I like the key change you made and the note changes. They’re solidifying things nicely.

For the key, you’re really moving towards the key of E minor - which has 1 F sharp in it. So I would suggest changing your key signature to just an F#. You can tell by a few things, but even just listening to the last measure the final E note really sounds like home base, doesn’t it?

So in the key of E minor, the scale you use is E, F#, G, A, B, C, D (or D#), E. The home tone is E (that is where things tend to want to move to), and important chords you can use are: E,G,B (E minor), A,C,E (A minor), and B,D#, F# (B major).

I’m attaching a screen shot to the file section of your piece - you can get there by going back and editing the piece. It will be file #1, labeled Screenshot for Ben. It shows how you can start your material on different notes so you’re not repeating the same things over and over. I even show you how can play it backwards, which is always a fun thing to try.

Last, the 3rds you have for the cello and violin aren’t really playable. String players can play two notes at once, but some are really hard/impossible . I would suggest having the cello just play an F in m. 7 and a G in m. 8, and the violin play the Ab in m. 9 and the G in m. 10.

Where is the piece going now? What are your plans?

Keep up the great work!

-Matt
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#2 Benjamin Poulin 2016-11-12 08:19
Hi Matt,

To answer your question about harmony or theory I know, very little. Usually when I start work on a piece I just write what comes into my head. Because of my lack of knowledge in this area, I din't quite understand what you meant by 'modal A' (I do not no this key) and 'the notes would be D E F E D E D E' (What are the 'notes' in this situation?)
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#1 Matthew LaRocca 2016-11-09 15:25
Hi Ben,

My name is Matt, and I’ll be working with on your piece. You’re off to a wonderful start. You’ve got a lot of great material to work with, and a lot of memorable melodies! It’s a very nice first posting.

Your description is helpful too, and I like the goals that you have. For elongating the beginning, I think that you can make measures 7-10 a bit longer. The introduction ends at m. 13, correct? In 7-10, there’s not much going on and you can add a little bit there. The figure at the beginning that we first see in the viola…why not give it to the cello or violin instead of whole notes? It will be a little more interesting and move the music forward. It doesn’t have to happen often, just a few of the ideas here and there.

Another question for you…how much harmony or theory do you know?

I love the power of the second section. It’s very effective. When you write, you should try to incorporate more sequences since you don’t really have a long melody but rather a short idea. Kind of like Beethoven’s fifth symphony. You need a little more variation in the music, and you can help create this by keeping the same idea but starting on different notes or changing the harmony underneath. Listen to the Beethoven symphony and notice how “bum bum bum bummm” starts on different notes all over the place.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_4IRMYuE1hI


Since you’re in A minor, try moving the viola melody to D (so there should be a d minor chord as the harmony). And just do you know, even though there are no sharps or flats, you more in A minor than C major. Or a modal A with all the B-flats you have. It’s good, but you should know where home base is for you. Anyway, so if it starts on D, the notes would be D E F E D E D E.

And you can play around and start it on different notes and see how you like it. But it will help you get away from too much repetition. As it is, you repeat things exactly too much. Change it up! Have fun! Experiment! don’t let yourself just copy and paste notes in note flight. Some ideas to try:

• What if you only have the violin? Or the Viola?
• What if the viola starts and the violin answers a measure later?
• What if the cello takes the viola line and plays it very low, and the violin plays a melody above it?

The possibilities are endless. Have fun and keep up the great work!

-Matt
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