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Connor Opus 33

Composer Name: Connor Byam
I am using piano and trombone. I am thinking of a royal procession.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: piano and trombone
Key: C major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 33 Grades 2-5

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#3 Erik Nielsen 2018-02-20 09:41
Dear Connor,
Thanks for posting the second version of your work and for answering my questions. I think that the trumpet melody in bars 2-5 has the potential to be a main theme and I hope to see more use of it. You've also added male voices to your ensemble. That could be really interesting. Just so you know, we have two male singers available for Opus, but as long as you keep us together and don't go any lower than what you have now we ought to be okay.
Comments:
1. Do you plan to have words in this piece? If so, you might want to work on that sooner rather than later.
2. You've written that you changed the key to A minor, but there are hardly any As in the lowest part. Using A in the left hand of the piano or in the male voices will reinforce the idea that A is "home". Using C and E along with the A will also help.
3. Your piece is full of skips and large leaps, but hardly any steps, that is, moving from one note up or down one step. Using mostly steps helps make the sound smoother, easier to perform and generally more successful.

Connor, I'm glad to see your piece is moving forward. Keep up the good work with your melody and please work on the things I've mentioned. I look forward to your next posting.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#2 Connor Byam 2018-02-19 14:44
Dear Eric thank you for the advice/feedback.

To answer your question, I intentionally changed the Trombone to Trumpet ( it sounds more royal). I have also changed my key to A minor. - Connor Byam
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#1 Erik Nielsen 2018-02-08 10:21
Dear Connor,
Thanks for posting the beginning of your piano piece and welcome to Music-COMP and the world of online composing. I will be your primary mentor for this work. It's off to a good start. I like how you the trumpet sounds as if it's doing a fanfare.
I have two questions:
1.You list the instrumentation as trombone and piano, but instead you've written for trumpet and piano. Either one is fine, but I just want to know what your intentions are.
2. You've listed the key as C major, but so far there isn't a single C in either instrument. It's very clearly in a sort of E minor (notice the Es in piano and the Bs in trumpet). I like what you have, but you need to be clear in your own mind as to what the "home note" is. If it's C, we need to hear that note a lot more. If it's E, just keep going.
Connor, your piece has a strong beginning. Think about what I've written and where you want the piece to go next. I look forward to your first revision.

Best wishes,
Erik Nielsen
Senior Mentor
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