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Grade Level: 7
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Alto sax/Vibraphone
Key: Concert g minor
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: Q=112
Status: Work in Progress
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Located in: Crossett Brook


#5 Matthew LaRocca 2017-05-01 10:58

Did you try harmonizing in 3rds or 6ths at m. 25? for example, the vibraphone starting on Eb two above middle C, which would make sixth harmonizations. The open fifths sound a little off to me - but if you like them, then leave em there!

The last thing is you should write "Freely" above the vib part in the beginning. This way the musician will know that they can take their time with it and be expressive.

#4 Tanum Nelson 2017-05-01 10:51
Thanks! I really appreciate your comments and have made the changes!
#3 Matthew LaRocca 2017-04-30 16:33
Hi Tanum,

Of course! I think this new piece is really great. These changes work very well too! I love the new section at 18. I think it flows amazingly.

Here are a few things that you should try out.

-Add dynamics to your vib part - it has some, but not enough.

-There are some instances where I think it may be cool to harmonize between the two instruments. Like in m. 26. It’s a really nice tag to close out the section, There are so few instances of harmony, what if you harmonized this section in 3rds or 6ths? I think it could be very effective.

-You end almost every phrase on a G, and to help create a piece that moves forward it is often helpful to not completely close each section on the home tone. Especially if the next section starts on the home tone. So when the vib has the solo ending in m. 16 (which I think will work very well, by the way), try ending it on an F instead of a G. Then you create a little bit of tension when you start again on G in the next measure. It helps make the music feel more flowing and less stop and start. See if you like it. It certainly works as you have it now, but it’s worth it to try out the other way as well.

I love the ending now. It’s more dramatic, and brings the piece to a better close. Do you want a ritardando at all in the last two measures?

Great work, Tanum!

#2 Tanum Nelson 2017-04-28 19:11
Hey Matt!
Thank you SO much for being so flexible with me changing my whole piece! Your suggestions were really helpful and I have made the changes.
Thanks again!
#1 Matthew LaRocca 2017-04-27 15:48
Hi Tanum,

Very cool! I love this new piece. It’s sounding great!

Here are some thoughts, and it’s going to be a lot because I know that the concert is coming up quick! Sorry for the barrage of ideas!

-The vib opening is great! I would consider changing m. 3 though to create a bar that really leads to the Bb in measure 4. It switches it up a bit from the first measure, which is nice too. But if you change the G half note to a G quarter followed by an A quarter, you can really connect measure 3 and 4.

- In measure 5, don’t change tempo for just a measure. Rather put a fermata over that note.

-the grace note in measure 5 may be pretty slow - for vibraphone to play it they need both hands, so it may not sound like a very clean fast grace note you’re used to. Just so you know.

-The descending chords in the vibraphone are beautiful.

-measure 8, I don’t think you should repeat measure 6 exactly. Very similar to the first comment about the vibraphone. you may want to try to switch it up just a little bit.

-What do you think about adding two bars after measure 15? Sometimes an “echo” effect is really cool. The line the sax plays in 14-15 could be repeated in the vibraphone, but at a lower dynamic (p or pp). This would actually set up the B part of your piece at measure 16 a little better too. Try it out and see what you think!

-I think the interplay between the vib and sax really works well. Especially in m. 16. I honestly think you could add more of this. You could think about expanding all of this. The melody could come back to the vibraphone, but this time an octave up and the alto could play a supporting role.

-There’s no need for a new metronome mark at m. 21. Rather, put “poco piu mosso” above which means ( a little more quickly) and is easier for the musicians.

-What do you think about a longer arpeggio for the vib at the end? Two octaves, so it ends with a whole note? I think a little longer ending here would be nice to really drag it out.

Great work, and such a cool piece! Let me know if you have any questions.


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