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Sonata in D Major: II. Adagio

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This is the second movement of a sonata in D Major. In the first 16 measures, the left hand has the melody while the right hand accompanies it with arpeggios. The left hand has two voices. In measures 17-24, the left hand plays arpeggios and accompanies the right hand. In measures 25-32, the left hand holds the melody again, and the right hand accompanies it. The piece can be found here: https://www.noteflight.com/scores/view/e77e204270643585d8fa3906a753769205acd5c6
Grade Level: 8
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano
Key: D Major
Meter Signature: 3/8
Tempo: Adagio
Status: Work in Progress

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#4 Erik Nielsen 2016-10-29 12:29
Dear Alexander,
Thanks for enabling sharing. I've now been able to see and hear your piece. Once again you show a strong harmonic sense that is both impressive and important. We often take this for granted until we see composers (usually inexperienced ones) who don't have it!
I have several questions for you. First, why did you name this an adagio movement? It's much too lively for an adagio. Check out this beautiful adagio from Bach's F minor keyboard concerto https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cakS5GXADdw on Youtube to get the idea of a more typical adagio. And yes, these terms do make a difference, because they predispose us to listen for a particular tempo and overall feel of a piece. Yours is more like an allegretto or allegro.
Second, why do you feel it necessary to have two parts in the left hand? Your melody handles the harmonic implications just fine in bars 1-16 and wherever else it has the lead.
Now on to the material itself. Like the first movement of this piece, this movement is so very arpeggio-center ed that we really don't get a true melody at all. This is because the melodic material in left hand (as well as the right hand accompaniment) is all skips, without any real scale or stepwise passages to give continuity. What you have as the melody is more like a bass part than a true melody. The right hand is more melodic in bars 17-24, but is quite limited in scope.
My biggest question for you now, Alexander, is how set this movement is in your ears. If you've heard it so much it will be difficult to make substantial changes, it may be best to leave it and go on to the next movement. However, if you are able to work on the left hand to deal with the issues I've raised, and can lengthen the right hand melody so it's longer than eight bars and the harmony is more varied, I think you'll see a big improvement. Please think about what I've written, including the question of tempo and name, and let me know if you have questions. I look forward to seeing either a revision or the next movement soon.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#3 Erik Nielsen 2016-10-26 11:41
Dear Alexander,
Thanks for posting a link to your score. Unfortunately, your music score is not visible to anyone besides you because you haven't set the Sharing correctly. I'm unable to comment on music that I can't see. Please fix following these steps.

1. Go to your Noteflight score so it's on the computer screen.
2. Go to the Sharing tab.
3. Change so it reads "Who can access this score, "all site members."
4. SAVE.

Once you've fixed the sharing settings, please send me a message here in the discussion area. Then I can work with you and your piece. Thanks.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#2 Erik Nielsen 2016-10-12 11:42
Dear Alexander,
Thanks for posting the description of your second movement. Unfortunately, I don't see a link to the piece. Am I missing something or did you forget to post it? Since I'm not seeing it, can you please post the link to the work? Once you've done that we can start the mentoring process.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#1 Sandi MacLeod 2016-10-10 21:00
Hello Alexander,

Thanks for your post in the new section of the mentoring site. You'll notice a few cosmetic changes over the next few days, so don't be alarmed. I'll alert Erik that you've posted this new work so he can provide you with feedback.

Sandi
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