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A peice for violin, viola, cello, and piano. A slow and short peice
Grade Level: 8
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: piano quartet
Key: b minor
Meter Signature: 3/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#2 Erik Nielsen 2017-09-18 13:10
Dear Jasmin,
Thanks for taking care of most of the items that I mentioned last time. There are just a few to go and then the piece will be ready to be printed.
1. You have a crescendo in bars 5-6 in violin, cello and piano, but only the violin has a dynamic mark in bar 7 as the goal of the crescendo. Please put an f in all the other parts (including the viola which has the melody) at the beginning of 7.
2. In bar 29, an F will definitely sound better in viola than the G you have on the fourth note as it won't clash with the violin, so please make that change.
3. At the end of the piece the violin needs a rit. mark above it to match the cello. The cello ought to match the violin in fading away, so I'd put a decrescendo for it in bars 47-48 and make both parts pp at the end of the piece.

I can't remember whether I taught you how to automatically get multi-measure rests to go into your parts, but if not it's easy. Just click on the Settings icon in the upper left of the toolbar above your music (it's the gear wheel-shaped icon), then click on Formatting in the upper menu that shows up on the Settings page. Near the bottom of the Formatting page that is a check box that says "automatically create multi-measure rests". Check the box, then save your changes.
Once you've taken care of these things, please write me a note to say you've done it, as I won't know otherwise (as it is, I have no idea when you made the changes I've noticed). Once that happens we can make sure to get the individual parts made so I can get them to the musicians. Please let me know if you have questions. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#1 Erik Nielsen 2017-08-02 15:39
Dear Jasmin,
I really enjoyed working with you last week, even though you were only able to make it for the first time on Tuesday. That makes what you accomplished all the more impressive. When I think of your work from last year, as charming as it was, The City Realm is at a much higher level. It's truly lovely.
There are a few notes, dynamics and rests that need a little work. The list will look long, but the items themselves will take next to no time to take care of. Here we go.
The cello needs a dynamic mark in the first bar (how about mf to match the piano?). I also think the viola ought to be at mf in bar 3 since it takes over the melody. And the violin needs a dynamic at the beginning of bar 5 (how about p?) before its crescendo.
In bar 7 is everyone f or just the violin? If everyone is, how about a crescendo in cello and piano in bars 5-6 to match violin. I'd also make sure the viola was f in 7 because it has the melody.
At letter A, in violin I'd change the fourth note from F to G.
At bar 17 I'd change the first and third viola notes from A to B flat.
In bar 21, again in viola, I'd change the fourth note from F to A.
And I'd move all the notes in violin starting on the last note of 21 later by an eighth so there are three quarter notes in bar 22: E natural-D-A followed by a dotted half G on 23. I'd make the final beat of 21 a quarter note D. At the moment it just sounds as if the violin is fighting everyone else rhythmically. Try it and see what you think.
At rehearsal B I think changing the final viola note of that bar 26 from E flat to E natural (to match the violin) would sound better. Try it and see what you think.
And in bar 29 in viola I'd change the fourth note from G to F.
At the end, I'd give the cello a decrescendo to match the violin's and I'd put them at pp at the very end. The violin also needs a rit. mark above its part there like the cello.

Jasmin, I know this seems like a lot, but it won't take long to do. Please let me know if anything I've written is unclear, write me a comment to let me know what you've done, and then we'll take care of score preparation. I look forward to hearing from you again soon.

Best wishes,
Erik
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