Mentoring Program

Take me There

Composer Name: Isabelle Maranda
Its a happy song, and a place everyone wants to go.
Grade Level: 9
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: piano and trumpet
Key: Db
Meter Signature: ?
Tempo: 120-100
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#5 Lee Heuermann 2018-02-21 13:59
Hi Isabelle,

Thank you for telling me about yourself. That’s wonderful that you play flute and sing and are so athletic as well. How exciting that you ride Icelandic horses competitively! My niece Lily and her mom, my sister, also ride horses and I’m happy to live near them and get to know their 5 horses.

Terrific job on the opening of your piece, Take Me There. I really like your opening trumpet melody and the shape of the line, especially captures a feeling of excitement and exuberance by the way it immediately climbs up and then descends. I also like that you’re using sequences (repeated patterns ascending or descending on different notes) as I feel that gives a feeling of unity. The listener has time to really take in the melodic gesture because it’s repeated in a varied way. Nice job!

Please do switch the trumpet part into treble clef. I really like the expansive quality of your trumpet line with the sweep up and down. I also appreciate Stephanie’s comment about the overlapping trumpet and piano in mms. 3 and 4, but the sweep is so nice as well as the sequences that I hate for you to take those measures down an octave. I personally still think the trumpet part will stand out as is and that the overlapping is not too significant. I’d rather keep the melodic contour of the trumpet as is. The dissonance you have in m. 4 on the and of 3 (second eighth note of beat 3) between the f and gb is fine as your f in the trumpet resolves immediately to the e.

However, I do think the left hand octaves of the piano part in measures 3 and 4 need to come down an octave. I also do like the interaction between the trumpet part and the right hand of the piano part.

And I like how you resolve this opening section - after a lot of motion, with the repeated F’s in m. 8 in the RH of the piano. That creates a sense of a resting point and also gives a feeling of anticipation of what’s to come next.

Which leads me to: What are you imagining will come next? If you begin with the trumpet in the lower to mid range that leaves room for it to climb higher in your next section/s, which could be nice and exciting.

When I’m working on a piece and I already have my title, I would try and connect with that to capture what it suggests. Your title is Take Me There,
and as the listener, I wonder where “there” is? What is “there” like? What kind of feeling do you want to create next?

A few other ways to approach what comes next might be:

to look at what you’ve got so far, and take one gesture or element, for example, like the first two opening measures of the trumpet part and begin to imagine how you could develop or vary that.
think of something that would contrast with what you have so far
3) look at the features of your piece so far, and imagine how you would expand upon them.

I can’t wait to see what you do next. Let me know if you have any questions!


Lee
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#4 Isabelle Maranda 2018-02-20 20:13
Hi Lee, I was wondering where my comments are located? I would like to work on my piece.
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#3 Isabelle Maranda 2018-02-17 11:23
Hi Lee! I really enjoy writing music. I played flute for 4 years, then I decided to focus on chorus. I play basketball, soccer, and I ride Icelandic horses competitively. I am very social and love all subjects in school. I travel a lot with my family and for competitions throughout the world.
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#2 Lee Heuermann 2018-02-13 07:33
Dear Isabelle,

I’m so happy to meet you! I’ll be your mentor for Opus 33 and I’m very excited to get to know you and your music! I’m a composer and performer (voice, piano and flute) and love many kinds of music - classical, jazz, and especially music from India, Africa and Brazil. I live and teach in Berkeley, California. I feel especially exited because right now I am writing to you from Trinidad, which is a small country and island to the south of Venezuela. I am here for their Carnival and to learn more about their wonderful Calypso music. I will return in about 1 week but will be able to receive your music postings here.

I think you’re off to a great start with your piece and I love your title and idea of writing a "happy song" about "a place that everyone wants to go to". I am traveling today, but later this evening I should be able to listen more carefully and offer you some comments/sugges tions, so "stay tuned"!.

In the meantime, On the Music-COMP website - go to the “Resources” tab, then select “More Resources for Student Composers”.

Check out the “Brass”, “Percussion Using Noteflight”, “Composing for the Piano” and the “Piano Podcast Here”.

As we’re getting started working together, please tell me a little about yourself, how you like to spend your time, what are your favorite things in school and out, and how long have you been involved in music and what instrument/s do you play? This will help me get more of a sense of who you are and how that relates to the music you compose.

I'll get back to you soon with comments!


Lee
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#1 Stefanie Weigand 2018-02-12 11:05
Can't wait to see this work progress, Izzy!
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