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Composer Name: Anthony Bellizzi
I want to have a poem being spoken on top of the music. I also want to try a kind of free time section where the musicians are cued but the words that are being said. In the idea i provide I have the melody always being the top note and the chords are just the harmony i kinda want.
Grade Level: 12
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: to be decided
Key: starting in d minor not going to stay there tho
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 100
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#8 Travis Ramsey 2018-02-15 20:13
Hi Anthony, let's work on your new idea. First, what shape do you imagine it will take? Are you looking to come up with a cool repeated pattern of 16th notes like you already have in measure 9? Or is the idea at measure 9 just sort of an interruption of measures 1-8 and you will return to it soon? Here are some ideas that might help. First, a fun piece by a relatively recent composer, Bartok. He has a simple melody and a dissonant chord idea that keep interrupting each other.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pi4ImGy-W-s
Second, a Bach piece that really cooks and has some very cool 16th note writing. Anything sound interesting enough to get ideas from?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HB8-w5CvMls
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#7 Anthony Bellizzi 2018-02-14 12:38
Hi and sorry for the confusion i was moving fast and had to send something to you quickly. I to think that the melody wants to keep moving up and i will do that. I am unable to get a poem that i like so i am going to not do that. I do want to work an a new idea very soon. The new idea im working on has to do with that extra measure on the end. Im trying to figure out where to take that. If you could lend a hand that would be great. Again sorry for the confusion.
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#6 Travis Ramsey 2018-02-12 19:41
Hi Anthony,
I am excited to hear where you'll take the motive now that it runs back up F-G-A. To my ears, it "wants" to go up one more time before something new happens. Do you hear it too?
Can you tell me more about the poem you plan on including? Where will it happen? What will you do as a composer to make sure that it can be heard above the piano?
Also, what's this new idea at m. 9? It was a surprise to me. It's very dissonant; I'm assuming that was your intent, right? Is the dissonance related to something in the poem?
Lastly, you mentioned a puddle. I'm confused -- what's the puddle all about?

Travis
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#5 Anthony Bellizzi 2018-02-12 13:04
I really liked your ideas and im working throught them in my head and ill write them down when i have the chance i added the puddle and i went up on the last little motif thing with f to g to a
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#4 Travis Ramsey 2018-02-02 21:15
Hi again, it's great that you already have a poet in mind. Even if he's someone you know well I'd recommend getting permission in writing. It would just take a few minutes and it's a good habit to get into. You don't want to be in the situation of having written an amazing piece only to find out that the permission you were sure you'd get, you can't (ask me how I learned THAT lesson!). Anywho, on to music and your reply.
As to where to take the melody, that's totally up to you. If you're stuck, though, try these out. Use a sequence. (Take an idea you already wrote, and repeat it down a step lower or higher.) You already have quite a few descending sequences, so why not try a higher one. You could try repeatnig the idea in your last measure G-F-E at A-G-F, or maybe C-Bb-A. This last choice ending on A is my favorite because your melody will still have a half-step in the same place.
Another idea is to get away from block chords briefly, even for a couple of beats. Throw in that arpeggio you mentioned.
A third idea is to introduce a new rhythm. We see the dotted quarter/eighth going to half note a lot. Would a faster rhythm or slower rhythm give it a nice balance?
As to the D2/F#, I don't see that. Did you start a new file? If you do please be sure to let me know so I'm looking at the right music. Did it sound like a puddle (lovely description!) in computer playback? If it did I wouldn't worry - can you try it out on a real piano?
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#3 Anthony Bellizzi 2018-02-01 13:04
Do you have any ideas on where i can go next wit this tune that would be great. I added a measure with an arpegiated d2/F# i think it sounds like a puddle if you use sustain.
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#2 Anthony Bellizzi 2018-02-01 13:02
Thank you for your suggestions im working on getting a poem from a guy used to work with a retired poet so im working something out with him. I will respell that chord those are just the notes i heard and what my brain decided to call them and i just wanted to write it down before it got away from me
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#1 Travis Ramsey 2018-01-30 20:53
Hi Anthony, and welcome! I'll be your mentor this spring. I am curious about you: what inspires you to write music? How do you write? And most importantly, what kind of help can I give you that will be the most helpful to you?

I'm looking at your composition now. Here are some things I see.

1. First of all, I love that you're branching out and exploring some more "modern" concepts like spoken word. Done well, I think it can be very effective as long as the words don't get in the way of your music. Also, we need to be very careful that the words you choose are something you have permission to use. Could you tell more about the poem and who wrote it? Also, I'd like to ask the people "in charge" if spoken word recitations are acceptable for the judging process. I'll do that now and let you know what I find out.

2. I like the chords you picked, too. They are surprising and very colorful. To make it easier for the performers to read them correctly, please consider respelling a few of them. In measure 6, I'd spell this as a G-flat instead of F#. So, bottom to top, Gb, Db, Ab, Eb, Bb. And in the next measure, respell the bottom G# as a A-flat. In general though I really like the voicing of the chords and how you use 4th and 5ths. The contrary motion between the two hands in 6-7 is particularly effective.

Nice to "meet" you, and please let me know if there is something specific I can do to help you even more.

Travis
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