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The Stars we See

Composer Name: Allison Cooper-Ellis
A piece that was originally for a string orchestra but sounds nice as a piano piece too.
Grade Level: 8
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano
Key: C Minor
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: quarter note = 60
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 33 Grades 6-8

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#4 Rebecca Larkin 2018-02-21 01:52
Hi Alli,

I really like the C chords you've added and the dynamic contrast at the end. As for your question about tempo, there should be a way for you to change the "quarter note equals" marking at the top of the page, and then become faster at the Presto. Maybe your teacher can help you figure this out in the classroom?

I don't think you need more of the C chords, but if there are other places you would like to try using them, feel free. Speaking of dynamics, how loud do you think the very beginning is? And does it become louder or softer at measure 9?

You've mentioned that you already have some ideas on how to expand the piece. You don't have to add them yet if you're not ready to, but around which measures were you planning on adding more?

Keep up the good work, and post again when you've made some more changes or if you have any questions.

Best,
Rebecca
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#3 Allison Cooper-Ellis 2018-02-18 07:27
I have added some things to the music. Do you think I should include more C chords? I am not quite sure how to slow the piece down and then make it faster again at measure 9. Do you like the contrast between forte and piano near the end of the piece?
Alli
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#2 Allison Cooper-Ellis 2018-02-14 20:15
Hi Rebecca,
Thanks for the comments. I think I would like to make it longer piece. I have some Ideas that I can put into the piece later. I set the piece at a slower tempo and I do like the affect of it. I put some of those C minor chords in place and I will add more, just wanted to respond to your comment so that you knew I had read it and am making the adjustments! thank you for the suggestions,
Alli
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#1 Rebecca Larkin 2018-02-12 04:22
Hi Allison,

My name is Rebecca and I'll be your mentor for Op. 33.

I like what you've got so far. You've mentioned that it was originally written for string orchestra, so what are you hoping to do with it now? Are you interested in making the piece any longer? Or would you just like some help adapting it for piano?

One thought I had while listening was to play with the tempo some. Your opening is so dramatic, and I feel like it could be even more so if the tempo were slower. Possibly 100 BPM or slower. That way, beginning could feel a bit heavier, and you could speed the tempo up again at measure 9.

I was also thinking that building a C minor chord below your right hand C in the first measure (and other places where you've used that motive) could be dark and effective. Especially the second half of measure 15 could use more drama, since you've just ended that large passage of running 16ths.

You've got a great start and I'm looking forward to working with you! Let me know what you think of my suggestions, and definitely let me know if you have any questions.

Best,
Rebecca
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