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War of Four

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This peace is a war between four instruments; a Piano, a Cello, a Violin, and a Viola. There is a short intro at the beginning followed by a dramatic change in tempo, volume and spirit. The instruments talk back and forth within the piece forming organized chaos for the instruments until it abruptly ends.
Grade Level: 9
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano, Violin, Viola, Cello
Key: E Major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 100/140
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title


#15 Jake Lester 2017-04-04 16:13
Hi Sam,

Thanks again for all the hard work you put into your piece. While it wasn't chosen for performance at Opus, that doesn't take away from all the effort you put into the piece, or the skill it takes to simply start a composition. You should feel proud of your work. Don't give up! I hope to work with you again sometime!

#14 Jake Lester 2017-03-30 16:00
Hey Sam,

I really like what you've done here. I think the sudden transition back to the opening theme works really well! It's really cool to hear that theme come back again in a new context. I think some of your concern with the transitions would be alleviated with live performers instead of computer playback, but if selected, you'll obviously have some more time to work on things that concern you. For now, I'd say you're ready to submit. Thanks for your hard work, Sam! It's been a pleasure.

#13 Sam Beste 2017-03-30 14:09
Hi, last day! thanks for being my mentor, I brought back the beginning at the end. Its not exactly what I want but I guess if I get selected I can work on it a little more to make it smoother. Overall I like how the piece came out besides a few transitions and minor issues I really like it. Thanks!
#12 Jake Lester 2017-03-27 17:59
Hey Sam,

I definitely dig the new section right before the ending. I'm looking forward to seeing how you continue to expand it. Again, I think this might be a nice spot to reuse an idea from earlier in the piece in order to create some sense of familiarity, since as of right now, though it is all written in the same style, none of the material in the piece returns.

I might also consider including the piano in that final measure, but I'll leave the final decision up to you on that.

Great work Sam! We're fast approaching the deadline, but we're in great shape, so don't worry about it.

#11 Sam Beste 2017-03-27 09:48
Hi, I cant agree more. The ending comes way to fast and I feel like it leaves a lot to be desired. What I think I will do is have that short set of chords right before the end lead into something and then have the same ending after that. Don't know if that made any sense but I started filling in with some variation of the melody and I will continue later just ran out of time. Thanks!
#10 Jake Lester 2017-03-26 18:47
Hey Sam,

Great update! I like the title!

You've addressed my only real concern with the piece in creating more variety in the cello part, and you've made the exchanges between the different instruments even more interesting! Your use of articulations helps to drive home that feeling of intensity that I brought up last time. Great job!

The only feedback I want to give at this point is that I want to hear more! I like it a lot, and I feel it ends too soon. If you don't want to write a ton of new music, you could consider repeating certain sections from the faster portion of the piece in some way. Repetition would allow you to better highlight a melody/motif/id ea that you'd want listeners to recognize as the main idea. Just an idea!

Now, a short piece of music is certainly okay, as that is a compositional decision one is free to make, but I'd personally like to hear more.

Thanks for your hard work, Sam!
#9 Sam Beste 2017-03-25 16:30
Correction- War of four I counted the piano as two instruments! Oops!
#8 Sam Beste 2017-03-25 16:29
Hi, thank you so much! I came up with a title, "War of Five" because of the way the instruments "Fight" back and forth. I added quite a bit and gave it a fun ending but I think I am going to continue adding to the middle to "fill" the song. Let me know what you think so far. I also added some dynamics to the beginning and I slowed down the intro a little bit to make the tempo change more drastic. I moved the tempo change one measure less so that the cello could play 4 notes to set the tempo for the other instruments. Hope to hear back from you!
#7 Jake Lester 2017-03-22 14:56
Hey Sam,

Have you updated this since we last talked? I can't remember since it's been a while, but in any case, the piece sounds great. I love all the little exchanges between the different instruments and there's a great feeling of pulse and intensity to the music. I would still consider how you might like to do more with the cello line. You could always allow the piano to drive the pulse at some point.

As for a title, perhaps it could reflect the feelings of sadness and intensity that the music creates? It's certainly not a happy piece.

Thanks Sam! Looking forward to hearing more. Just be aware that the deadline for submissions is next Thursday.

#6 Sam Beste 2017-03-20 17:37
Hey! completely forgot to check the site... Probably should turn on my notifications for posting. Any ideas for a title? Going to be adding a few measures let me know what you think! Thanks

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