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Wanted Man's Jig

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A jig type tune with a bit of a swashbuckling lilt, this piece conjures the image of a swaggering pirate captain making his rounds on board his ship. If you listen closely, you can hear the men diligently attending their duties, the right hand man listing off important pirate things that need the captain's attention, and the British Royal Navy ships somewhere off in the distance.
Grade Level: 12
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Violin, Violin, Viola, Cello
Key: C minor
Meter Signature: 6/8, 3/8
Tempo: Dotted Quarter = 50
Status: Completed Work
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#15 Evan Premo 2017-04-17 18:20
HI Rachel,
I love the title and I think the form is great. I think you're good to go! Congratulations,
Evan
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#14 Rachel Schwartz 2017-04-12 21:35
Hey Evan!

I definitely need to come up with a title. That will happen ASAP. I know these are due soon, but I met with Erik Nielson the other day at Harwood and he suggested some changes. I was wondering if you had any suggestions on how to make the end of the coda sound less like the beginning of it. I added some build-up and some extra fast notes, but it still doesn't feel like enough. I'm also working on expanding that B section, but I'm a little unsure where to take it.

Thanks!

Rachel
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#13 Evan Premo 2017-04-05 14:17
HI Rachel,
Congratulations for being selected for Opus! I love the last changes you made to the piece too! It's a very strong piece. Now it's time to prepare your score for performance. It's in pretty good shape right now.

1. Title it! I think it's time for a title - and it's too evocative to remain untitled, in my opinion.

2. Make sure your bio and piece description are accurate and as you like as they will be printed in the program.

3. Your dynamic scheme looks complete and musical. You made great use of slurs.

I think you'll be good to go!

Again, great work!
Evan
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#12 Rachel Schwartz 2017-03-30 22:30
Hey Evan,

Thanks for the great advice! I think I figured out the B section (though my good ear tricked me; I got to a certain point and realized I was writing Pirates of the Caribbean. Whoops). I'm not entirely happy with the length or the exact form. There are places I'd still like to stretch and develop. But it's a good little ditty and I think it has a strong ending. I did do some alterations so it's more of an A prime in an attempt to add some finality. I think I succeeded.

Thanks!

- Rachel
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#11 Evan Premo 2017-03-29 22:20
ps: I love the 3/8 bar! It creates a great elision.
Evan
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#10 Evan Premo 2017-03-29 22:18
HI Rachel,
I think that's a fantastic start to the B section. Keep going with it... your ear is really good. I hope you have some time to put into it tomorrow. I think you could complete the piece by finishing the B section, returning to the A section and then adding an ending (CODA) which could be reminiscent of the beginning except with more finality.
Best,
Evan
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#9 Rachel Schwartz 2017-03-26 19:52
Hi again Evan,

I've done a bit of work and I think I need another push in the right direction. I am getting nowhere with that B section. I know at some point I'd really like to take advantage of a hemiola and I think I have something for that, but it feels sudden and out of the blue, as if something else should have come first.

I hope you've had a good weekend!

- Rachel
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#8 Rachel Schwartz 2017-03-25 19:58
Hey Evan,

I wanted to let you know that I promise I'm not ignoring you or this piece or the deadline (I do really appreciate your help). I'm about to hopefully go make some pretty significant changes but I wanted to respond first so you know this isn't stagnant.

- Rachel
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#7 Evan Premo 2017-03-25 09:32
Hi Rachel,
The opening of this piece is really strong, I would really love to hear where it goes from here. The deadline for submission to Opus is Thursday at midnight. See if you can draft a conclusion to the piece early in the week (even if it's a short piece). Then I'll check back in and give some tips before you have to submit it on Thursday.
Best,
Evan
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#6 Evan Premo 2017-03-18 17:25
Hi Rachel,

I'm really liking what I'm hearing with your piece. Keep in mind, too, that it would sound soo much better with really people playing real instruments.

For the opening drone, I would divide that up between the first and second violin. That double stop (chord) isn't actually possible on one violin.

I really like measure 12 a lot. I would keep that texture going somehow in 13-15 and onward. The repeated notes in the viola is really effective.

The violin part in measures 12-19 (the melody) is a really strong A section. If it were me, my next step would be to write a B section that has a new melody (maybe going even higher in the violin (opening up a new register, it's called). Then as you create a cello part and harmony, you might find some new chords as well.

Keep going! Keep going! Keep writing!

Best,
Evan
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