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Life Of a Queen

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A slow piano and string duet
Grade Level: 9
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano, Cello
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 60-120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#10 Evan Premo 2017-04-05 14:25
Hi Asom,
Great work on your piece this term! Sorry you weren't chosen for live performance at Opus but I REALLY hope you'll write another piece next year and try again.
Take care and be well!
Evan
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#9 Evan Premo 2017-03-29 22:12
Hi Asam,
I think that's a good idea. Would you be cutting to b 49? Then it would be great to orchestrate out some of your piano melodies into the strings a bit more. Then I think the ending needs a slight extension to feel a bit less random.
Good work!
Evan
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#8 Asom Hayman-Jones 2017-03-28 07:58
Hi Evan,
Sorry that I haven't got back to you in a while. I was thinking about taking a whole section out to shorten the piece. Starting at measure 25. I'm defiantly in a rush for the deadline but there is so many changes i need to do.
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#7 Evan Premo 2017-03-25 09:27
Hi Asom,
Just a reminder the deadline for your piece is next Thursday at midnight.

It's at about 4.5 min right now so time to start shortening it down to fit the 3 min max time for opus. Also, it would be great to hear some of these solo piano sections orchestrated more to include the strings.

m 66 - I like the melody a lot - you could double that in the strings. Though I'm asking you to shorten the piece in total, if you're going to include this new section of music, I think it would be good to actually extend that a bit, otherwise it feels a bit random at the end.

You could consider cutting measures 17-48. Then developing the minor section a bit more and orchestrating it, then return to some of the beautiful opening material, then you would have a nice ABA form.

Best,
Evan
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#6 Evan Premo 2017-03-18 17:10
Hi Asom,
Just checking in. It seems like you've made some changes to the first 16 bars (with the addition of string instruments?) I think you have a really good sense for what will sound good. You've got a really good start for a kind of "minimalist" piece. Keep filling in the string parts, choosing your favorite piano sections as you go. And keep in mind that the time limit for Opus is 3min. Let me now when you make some more changes/additions.
Best,
Evan
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#5 Evan Premo 2017-02-16 08:49
Hi Asom,
I like your ideas about cello melody! The 10ths in bars 32-39 are ok, because you could use 2 hands to play them (there is nothing else going on in the other hand. We might consider re-notating them. So that the LH always uses the bottom staff. Or at least the stems go in different directions. It's fine for now. Try some other options for bars 47-50. Adding a cello might help you fill it out in the way you want. Make sure to try playing it on a piano.
My very best,
Evan
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#4 Asom Hayman-Jones 2017-02-15 07:53
Hello Mr. Premo,

Thanks for all the help, this score was simply something that I put al my ideas on and I image in the future to be narrowing it down to under three minutes. I did make a copy of this score so I can keep the original. So I'll be able to make big changes on the one being submitted to opus. Also I do plan on adding a cello and maybe another string instrument but I'm hesitant because I usually don't compose for piano and cello duets. Im thinking of giving the right hands melody to the cello so there can be a call and response between the piano and cello. But maybe not, what do you think? Also, what should I do about the 10th interval? I'm not sure how to replace it.

Thanks Again,

Asom
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#3 Evan Premo 2017-02-11 10:12
Hi again Asom,
I just checked with Sandi MacLeod about time limits for consideration in Opus. The limit is 3 minutes for consideration. Here was Sandi's recommendation for going forward:

"Go to Noteflight and make a copy. Rename the copy to something like Original XXX and be sure to continue for Opus with the original. Students won't loose the original work they were in love with, but have a new score to revise to meet the Opus requirements. It's important to continue working on the one that's been shared with Music-COMP because the Noteflight link will no longer be the current score for Opus."

That way you can feel free to edit/shorten to your heart's content without loosing any great ideas. Editing down is one of the most effective ways of making a piece better.

My best,
Evan
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#2 Evan Premo 2017-02-11 08:49
HI Asom,

I'm Evan Premo, a professional composer and bass player living in Marshfield, VT. I'll be your mentor for "Life of a Queen." I'm really excited to be working on it with you.

I think it's a fantastic start - I feel it is a very cinematic piece and the vein of Phillip Glass. I really appreciate the specificity of your music notation, pedal markings, tempo change markings, slurs, fermatas...it's all really helpful.

Your notes are saying that this piece is a piano and string duet. Are you planning on adding an instrument? I could see that working nicely, although solo piano could be nice too.

The piece is already about 6 minutes long. Do you remember the time limits for Opus? I don't remember at the moment but I have an email into the director to ask?

For consideration for performance at Opus I think it's best to think about condensing the piece at this point. Choosing some of your favorite parts to develop, rather than extending it longer. That said, I really like the melodic section you just got to, and I could see that developing nicely.

One other thing to keep in mind is that a 10th is a large interval to reach for a pianist. I have fairly large hands and I can reach a 10th with my left hand and not so easily with my right hand. So depending on the pianist, it may be good to edit those sections for playability.

I look forward to hearing the next iteration!

My best,
Evan
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#1 Sandi MacLeod 2017-02-09 18:25
Asom,

Your score needs to be Shared so we can view. Here's how to fix it:
1. Open your Noteflight score.
2. Go to the Connect tab.
3. Select Share with all Site members.
4 SAVE
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