Mentoring Program

The Rose

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This piece speaks of my newfound love and passion for life. Seeing as the rose represents love and passion, I thought it was an ideal title for my piece. I plan for the music to intensify as it moves forward, bringing forth the vivid imagery of a growing rose. I'll probably add another melody (giving my piece an ABC format thus far), possibly in minor - roses have thorns, after all. I'll figure out how to end it later along in the composition process.
Grade Level: 12
Intended For: Not Sure
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: String Quartet
Key: C Major
Meter Signature: 3/4
Tempo: ♩ = 104
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#4 Erik Nielsen 2017-04-03 15:16
Dear Emily,
Thanks for entering your piece for Opus 32. Unfortunately, it was not chosen for performance. It was a fine beginning, you just ran out of time to work on it, given how busy you were. Nevertheless, I enjoyed mentoring you, and look forward to working with you on the piece for Opus 3.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#3 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-27 15:44
Dear Emily,
In looking through some files, I noticed that you have actually worked on your piece since the first posting. What I've seen is a big improvement. I really like the B theme in A minor as well as the added pizzicato. This is a big step forward. Now I hope you can finish the piece on time. Please remember that your piece is due in its final version this Thursday by midnight. Let me know if there's anything you need from me.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#2 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-22 14:58
Dear Emily,
I know you're a senior and extremely busy, and that you've had a hard slog getting "Starlit Waltz" ready for performance, but I just want to let you know that final versions of Opus 32 works are due by midnight next Thursday, March 30. Please let me know if you have questions. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#1 Erik Nielsen 2017-02-10 10:50
Dear Emily,
Thanks for posting the first version of your piece for string quartet. I'll be your mentor on this (yay!). Your piece is off to a good start. It has a very Celtic feel to it, particularly the melodic idea first heard in bars 15-18. I like how you have different "assignments" for each instrument and switch them around.
I do have some suggestions. Despite what I just wrote about switching parts around and how that extends the use of material, for me at least, the A idea is overused. We hear the four-bar idea four times over the first 34 bars (that is, it's present in almost half the bars). I think part of the issue is harmonic and textural, as well as melodic. That is, the harmonic palette so far is very limited. Note how exciting that very rare A minor chord sounds in bars 18 and 24. Otherwise it's all I, IV and V, some of them (particularly in bars 11, 15 and 31) in ineffective second inversions. In terms of texture, despite the use of slurs and staccatos (both good), everyone plays all the time, making the texture unrelievedly dense. How about giving each instrument a couple of bars off and/or switching some of the staccato passages to pizzicato?
Emily, this is a strong start. If you can lighten the texture a bit, vary the harmony more, extend the theme (I don't find the idea in bars 11-14 and 26-30 very interesting; can it be modified?) and/or give us something different (at least after 34), you ought to be able to make The Rose bloom a little more. Please let me know if you have questions. I look forward to seeing your first revision.

Best wishes,
Erik
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