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Pilgrimage

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The piece depicts a journey, starting out treacherous and intimidating, but becoming more manageable and enjoyable as it goes on. I envision that it would take place on horseback as at points the music reflects a gallop of a horse. It has a religious theme in that at the end the piece is in a major key and sounds similar to a church hymn.
Grade Level: 11
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Finale
Instrumentation: 2 Violins, Viola, Cello
Key: E minor, G Major
Meter Signature: 3/4
Tempo: 100
Status: Completed Work
File 2: application/pdfDownload
File 3: application/octet-streamDownload

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#23 Erik Nielsen 2017-04-12 10:15
Dear Davis,
I have uploaded a final version of the score in .pdf format to your folder on Drive. Please look it over and let me know if you have questions. You'll note that I've added a pp to the viola decrescendo at one bar before D, since otherwise it's making a decrescendo from p to p. The one thing that gives me a bit of hesitation is the cello's closed position B major chord in bar 16. I think he can handle the triple stop B minor chord at the beginning of the bar by using the open D string, but the B major may need an adjustment, so be prepared for that.
Finally, if the score looks good, print it out to bring with you to Opus 15 (more details to follow). Also, both your bio and the piece description could use elaboration. Please do some work on them, as Sandi will start looking at them soon to print for the program. And let me know if you have questions.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#22 Erik Nielsen 2017-04-05 11:33
Dear Davis,
Thanks so much for the prompt and detailed response. I've made the edits. To answer your question about violin II, viola and cello and their first entrance after C, I always include a new dynamic mark if there's more than a single bar rest since their last sounds. It eliminates questions. By the way, the only place that needs cues is at the beginning because everyone except violin I has more than 4 bars' rest (my yardstick for whether or not cues are needed), so I put them in.
If the piece description above is what you want to go into the printed program, leave it as is. Otherwise, please put in what you want. And make sure the bio that's included in your User Profile is what you want. Please take care of this as soon as possible. And please let me know if you have questions. I'll get back to you if I think of anything else. Good work!

Best wishes,
Erik
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#21 Davis Holt 2017-04-04 08:00
1.The cello decrescendo in bar 11 is a mistake
2. I think the viola crescendo should start midway through bar 13 and go to bar 16 but get rid of the pp and just have it crescendo to mp like it does in bar 15, if that is still too long it can start in bar 14 or halfway through bar 14.
3. The pizz and pp in bar 15 were a copy/paste error
4. I am not sure why the violins have a 16th note in bar 50, I probably wrote their parts before the viola and cello and forgot to change them. They should all have an 8th note. The breath mark should be after the final note in that measure.
5. That works, but all the instruments already decrescendo to p in the bar before C. I'm not sure if you would need to enter it again, but you might because it is a new section.
6. The breath mark before D should be a pause at the end of the measure before D, so at the end of the dotted half note that violin II, viola, and cello have. I'm not sure if you need to put something in the violin I part or not to indicate a pause before D.
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#20 Erik Nielsen 2017-04-03 15:31
Dear Davis,
Congratulations on having your piece, "Pilgrimage", chosen for Opus 32. It's a fine work and very deserving of selection. This is even more impressive, given how many strong pieces there were.
There aren't many score prep issues to deal with, but there are a few. Keep in mind that I'm working off a Sibelius "translation" from the .xml file you posted.
1. In my score the cello has a decrescendo in bar 11 BEFORE its first note. Is that what you have? If so, it needs to be eliminated. Just let me know and I'll get rid of it. If you wanted the decrescendo but it goes somewhere else, tell me where.
2. The first crescendo in viola, in bars 12-15, is really too long for the small increase in sound from ppp to pp. I'd shorten it so it's only from 14 to 15 or at most, halfway through 13 to 15.
3. In bar 15 the cello pizz. and pp are redundant so I got rid of them. That must have been a cut-and-paste.
4. In bar 50 why do the violins have a 16th note at the end of the bar while viola and cello have an eighth note? Also, is the breath mark supposed to come after the final note of the bar or somewhere else?
5. After rehearsal C for the first entrance in violin II, viola and cello I've put a p to match violin I. Let me know if that's okay.
6. At one bar before D where does the breath mark belong?
Once I get answers to all these questions I'll make the changes to save us both time. Do me a favor and answer with the specific numbers I've given. Please let me know if you have questions. Please do this before Thursday. Thanks.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#19 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-31 13:52
Dear Davis,
Thanks for re-posting the final version of your piece. It looks good. Congratulations on a fine work. No matter the outcome of the voting you've created a piece of which you can be proud. I look forward to working together again soon.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#18 Davis Holt 2017-03-30 21:42
It will still not allow xml files to be uploaded. I have not changed the piece since the 5th revision I uploaded to the Google drive folder, so that is the final version in xml format.
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#17 Davis Holt 2017-03-30 19:50
I added the last revision to the piece which was basically just doing all of your recommendations . If you can check it out great if not thats fine.
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#16 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-30 10:29
Dear Davis,
Thanks for re-posting. You've done good work on this. I know time is short, but I honestly don't have a lot of things that I see needing adjustment. Let me list what I see as missing.
1. In bar 57 I feel the lack of follow-up from violin II to what violin I has just stated. I'd have violin II echo violin I's material from bar 56 (i.e., the second bar of its line, starting on the note G) at 57, but have it end on G rather than E in bar 58. That will provide a better segue to what the lower strings are doing.
2. I'd tie the viola and cello notes over from bar 64 to 65 rather than re-articulate them.
3. And I'd add some more slurs on eighth notes at D so it's not all bowed.
Other than that, Davis, any more articulations you feel you can make will be good. Also, some sort of title at the beginning and your name as composer. I think this is all doable by tonight. You've done good work on this and the piece is almost there. Please let me know if you have questions. I look forward to one more post if possible before the deadline.
Oh, and one more thing. When you post your final version, please upload an .xml file, a Finale file AND a .pdf. We have some voting mentors who have Finale and others who may not have either Finale or Sibelius, thus the need for the .pdf. Thanks.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#15 Davis Holt 2017-03-29 18:58
Dear Erik,

I am done writing new material for this piece. If you could look it over before tomorrow evening that would be great, but if not I completely understand because it is very last minute.
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#14 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-27 15:46
Dear Davis,
I don't want to add to any pressure you may already feel, but your piece is due in its final version this Thursday by midnight. Let me know if there's anything you need from me.

Best wishes,
Erik
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