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Variation du Tempête De Liaison

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A Variation of Tempête De Liaison
Grade Level: 11
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: A string Quartet ( Double Base,Cello,Viola,Violin)
Key: Bb
Meter Signature: 4:4
Tempo: 80
Status: Work in Progress
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#14 anthony sheppard 2017-04-05 16:38
Hey Mr. Premo,
It has been my pleasure to work work with you for a bit. I thank you for the help and I will try a different Piece that I have started for Next year. Is there a way I could have your e-mail? I think we may be useful to each other in the future! Wish you well.

-Anthony J. Sheppard
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#13 Evan Premo 2017-04-05 14:19
Hi Anthony,

It's been great working with you! Though you weren't chosen this year for OPUS I really hope you'll continue composing and participate next year too!

Best of luck to you and all your endeavors!

Best,
Evan
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#12 anthony sheppard 2017-04-02 12:54
Hi Mr.Premo,

I Have done one more revision and Hope you enjoy this one. I think it it very close!Hope to hear from you.
-Anthony J. Sheppard
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#11 Evan Premo 2017-03-29 21:54
Hi Anthony,.
It's nice to have that opening section come back in the middle. Nice changes. Good work. There are a few double stops in the strings that would be challenging. I would recommend when possible to either make the double stops into one note or give one of the two notes to another string player.
My best,
Evan
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#10 anthony sheppard 2017-03-26 23:59
Hi Mr.Premo,

I have Done another edit and hope this is closer to what we are looking for. I times it and It is under time now and can have some smoother flowing parts. I am not sure how feasible the new ending is, But I think it would be worth a try! Hope to hear from you again !
-Anthony J. Sheppard
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#9 Evan Premo 2017-03-25 08:50
Hi Anthony,

Ok, cool. Just a reminder that the deadline is next Thursday at midnight.

I would recommend shortening your piece a bit. It's within the time allotment for opus but I think it could benefit from being shortened. Take those favorite spots you have and copy and paste them into a new file. You might even repeat some of those sections and change them a little bit each time you repeat (so not with repeat signs but actually copy and paste so that you can vary them as you go.

I think the main thing the piece needs is some repetition of sections, so that the listeners ear has something to hold onto. For example. Maybe the opening section could come back again at some point (and maybe when it comes back it's slightly different or maybe not). Thinking more about form (order of sections/when sections return) will really help.

One other comment. often times the bass part is actually higher than the cello part and I would recommend simply switching these two parts. When you put the cello notes into the bass part they will look an octave higher but sound the same (bass sounds an octave lower than written). Likewise, when you put the bass notes in the cello part they will look an octave lower but sound the same. Then you can change the clefs as necessary so that the majority of the notes at any one time are on the staff.

Have fun!
Evan
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#8 anthony sheppard 2017-03-24 12:07
I have almost finished a revision and Do not Like the outcome, But would like you to still Look at it. I did what I set my goal to... But it came Out too dark
-Anthony J. Sheppard
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#7 anthony sheppard 2017-03-20 12:50
Hey Mr.Premo,
Thank you for the timely response. I think my favorite spots would have to be 1-12, 22-26, 32-35, and 49- the end.
-Anthony J. Sheppard
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#6 Evan Premo 2017-03-18 16:55
Hi Anthony!

Cool! Good work. Ok, I think it's time really do some editing down. Your duration is over time at this point so the best thing you can do is some major editing. What are your 4 favorite measures (or sections) of the piece? I have a few favorite places myself, but I'd like to hear from you first! Then I'll add my favorites to the mix. Once we have found the measures you want to develop then we'll start really going to town developing those measures. And I can help you out with that...

I think the main thing the piece needs at this point is more repetition and then variation of that repetition. That will give the listener's ear something to hold on to!

I think the pizz section at 32 is a really strong start - it uses that triplet motive really well and then starts to deviate slowly.

Let me know those 4 favorite spots!
Best,
Evan
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#5 anthony sheppard 2017-03-16 12:12
Hi Mr. Premo,
That sounds like a wonderful way to start out! Also, I have made a few changes on chords but will experiment further to try a better combination of a chord progression. I am very open to any suggestions that you may have! I am also open for constructive criticism as well! I hope to here from you!
-Anthony J. Sheppard
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