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Grade Level: 7
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: piano
Key: c
Meter Signature: 4
Tempo: 100
Status: Completed Work
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 32 grades 6-8

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#14 Jake Lester 2017-04-04 16:16
Hi Fen,

Thanks again for all the hard work you put into your piece. While it wasn't chosen for performance at Opus, that doesn't take away from all the effort you put into the piece, or the skill it takes to simply start a composition. You should feel proud of your work and I hope that you keep composing in the future. Don't give up! I hope to work with you again sometime!

-Jake
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#13 Jake Lester 2017-03-30 15:35
Hi Fen,

Thanks for all your hard work! I think your piece has come a long way from where it started and you should be proud of your work. If you feel your piece is done, then I won't ask you to do any more, since it's the last day. If you do have any time tonight, I would recommend adding some dynamics.

One thing - please do not change your piece at all after tonight. Since tonight is the last night to work on pieces, working on it after that time would be unfair to other composers since you would be composing past the deadline. However, after next Sunday, you can work on your piece as much as you'd like. By then, we'll know if your piece has been selected for Opus or not, so it will be okay to work on it some more.

Thanks Fen! Hope to work with you again as well.

-Jake
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#12 Fen Jagoda 2017-03-29 18:15
hi Jake i think the piece is dun yet i am going to continue working no it it hes den fun composing this peys with you thank you for all your help hope to work with you again
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#11 Jake Lester 2017-03-22 15:37
Hi Fen,

Nice work! I'm finding the piece a lot easier to follow because of a few simple, but really great changes you made. The deadline for submissions is next Thursday night, so I don't want to overwhelm you with lots of stuff to do. I do have just a few suggestions for improvements you could make.

-Find a way to reuse the first 8 measures. To me, this is still the most memorable part of your piece. Perhaps you could stick those 8 measures at the end too?

-Use some dynamics. Right now, your piece is at only one volume. The piece really needs some dynamic contrast in order to be at the next level. Think of sections that you feel should be soft, and sections that you think should be loud (as well as spots where the volume could gradually get louder or softer) and write those dynamics.

-Use different articulations to tell the performer how to play each note. Some articulations tell the performer to play a note very short, like staccato
(which looks like . )
Other articulations tell the performer to give a strong attack to the beginning of the note, like marcato
(which looks like > )


Thanks Fen! Remember, the deadline is next Thursday night. Let me know if you have any questions at all.

-Jake
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#10 Fen Jagoda 2017-03-22 08:46
I've used a few of the measures slow down one of the measures used a couple of quarter notes I think that is pretty close to being done
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#9 Jake Lester 2017-03-16 16:04
Hi Fen,

For what to do next, I would focus on the exchange between the left and right hand in the piano. Having sections where each hand plays a section by itself is an interesting idea!

You also might want to have sections repeat. There are a lot of fast notes in your piece and it can be sort of hard to remember everything because it's all so fast. If you don't want to slow things down too much, repeating different phrases (short sections of music) will help listeners to understand your music more easily.

Also, please try and focus on what I said last time about stepwise motion. If you can, try and find spots to have notes move in the order they would in the scale.

Thanks Fen
-Jake
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#8 Fen Jagoda 2017-03-16 13:23
hi I have added sum slow ports to the melody and expend it a little I don’t know adopt the end
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#7 Jake Lester 2017-03-13 13:15
Hi Fen,

Thanks for the update. I like the changes you've made. You've done a good job with making sure your piece really feels like it is in C major. Removing the C# helped a lot with this too.

Now, I have some suggestions for what to do next:

-Try and slow things down occasionally, if you can. There are a lot of eighth and sixteenth notes in your melody and it all feels pretty fast.

-Try to use more stepwise motion in your melody. Right now, your melody has a lot of notes jumping around to other notes and they aren't always close to each other. Stepwise motion is when notes move in the order that they would move in a scale. For example, stepwise motion starting on C and going up to and down from G would look like: C D E F G F E D C. See how the notes are in their scale order? It can be very helpful to have a melody move this way sometimes. Do you think this is something you might like to try?

Thanks for a great update, Fen! Please let me know if you have any questions.

-Jake
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#6 Fen Jagoda 2017-03-13 07:40
I adid sum stuff for the left hand and cand th c# to a different nowt i also mad a few minor changes
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#5 Jake Lester 2017-03-09 16:05
Hi Fen!

No worries. Let me know when you have some more music written and we'll talk then!

Best,
Jake
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