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A stroll through the fields

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Grade Level: 8
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano, Flute, Trumpet, Trombone
Key: C Major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 90
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
File 1: text/htmlDownload
File 2: application/pdfDownload
Located in: Opus 32 grades 6-8

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#10 Lee Heuermann 2017-04-04 15:48
Dear Jake,

Thanks for entering your piece, “A Stroll Through the Fields” for Opus 32. Unfortunately, it was not chosen for performance. However, I congratulate you on the work you put into it and encourage you to keep composing. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. Please let me know if you have any questions.


Best wishes,


Lee
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#9 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-29 18:24
Hello Jake,

This is just a reminder that you must have your piece ready to submit to be considered for the Opus 32 concert by tomorrow, Thursday, 3/30/17.

Please see my notes from 3/27!

You might want to make sure you’ve added details like:

Dynamics (volume)
Please add dynamic markings (volume) such as forte (f), piano (p) or mezzo forte (mf), and crescendo or decrescendos throughout.

Articulations (legato, staccato, accent marks)
If you don’t write these in throughout the piece everything will be played detached, so if you want it to flow - use slurs for legato (flowing) or if you want it detached and short sounding use staccato. For accented attacks use accent marks. If you don’t put anything in (and sometimes you may want this) each note is played somewhat separated from the next.

Descriptive markings
In the beginning and at different points in your piece if the mood changes, you can use words to describe what you want, such as “sparkling” , “lively”, or whatever words you think best describe your piece and how you want it played. This really helps the performers and especially when there’s not a lot of rehearsal time this really helps the performers to understand what you want as the composer. Be specific!

You’re on the home stretch! Good Luck and let me know if you have any questions!


Lee
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#8 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-27 18:31
Dear Jake,

We’re getting down to the wire as the deadline for submitting your piece is this Thursday, 3/30/17.

As I wrote in my message of 3/20/17, you’ve got to change your instrumentation as we will not have trumpet and trombone for this concert. The easiest thing to do at this point would be to substitute oboe for the trumpet part and bassoon for the trombone part.

Go to this link:

musiccomp.wordpress.com/.../.. .

for the ranges and information of these instruments in case you need to revise anything.


Please jump into action so that you can get this done as soon as possible!


Let me know if you have any questions!


Lee
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#7 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-23 14:24
Dear Jake,

How’s everything going with your composing? I just wanted to check in with you and to remind you that you’re in the home stretch. You need to have your final draft of your composition ready by one week from today, Thursday, March 30th.

We will then select the pieces that will be performed on the Opus 32 concert. If your piece is selected, we will then work together on polishing all of the details for the final submission of your score to give to the performers.

Let me know if you have any questions and how I can help you, and please work hard to get things ready by next Thursday, 3/30.



Thanks and keep up the good work!


Lee
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#6 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-20 21:02
Dear Jake,

I’m looking at your PDF file of your score “A Stroll Through the Rice Fields”, and I can give you some comments based on that, but I really do need to hear it as well, so it’s important that you get the settings fixed. Ask your music teacher at school to help you with this please ASAP.

There are just 10 more days until March 30th which is the final date for posting your final draft to be considered for the Opus 32 Concert.

For the Opus 32 concert the choice of instrumentation is strings, woodwinds and piano. Unfortunately, not brass, so no trumpet and trombone. You could change the trumpet to clarinet or oboe, which would blend nicely with flute, and substitute either the bass clarinet or bassoon for the trombone. Go to this link:

https://musiccomp.wordpress.com/category/podcasts/

for the ranges and information of these instruments in case you need to revise anything.

Also, the order of instruments in your score from top to bottom should be flute, clarinet, bass clarinet (if that’s what you decide to use), and piano.

I really like your harmonies and melodic interactions between instruments. I also like that you have some nice dissonances like 2nds, 7ths, and 9th’s which add variety to the harmony and spice the sound up.

I see some of these dissonances in measure (m.) 16 - the C in the trombone to the D in the flute and in m. 22 - with the G in the flute and the A in the RH of the piano. I think these would sound even better if you filled out the harmonies with more notes.

In measures (mms.) 21, 25 and 34 - you have block chords in root position which sounds a bit chunky. I think it would sound better if you voiced these chords differently with more open voicings, perhaps the root and 5th in the LH of the piano and the third, seventh and root in the RH. Experiment with different inversions of your chords.

In mms. 31 and 32 you have a nice rhythm and thematic feeling. You could use it and develop it more.


Let me know if you have any questions and I hope to hear from you soon!


Lee
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#5 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-20 13:35
Dear Jake,

I hope you're doing well. I'm still not able to view your score and listen to it in Noteflight. Most likely you haven't set permission for us to view in Noteflight. Please follow these steps again and if it doesn't work, please check with your teacher and get their help:

1. Go into your Noteflight account. Click on this score. Make sure you can see the score on the screen.
2. Click on Connect button.
3. “Who can access this score” - select All site members
4.. Select All site members can View. Anyone can search/browse to find it.
5.. Save.

Let us know here when you've fixed the sharing permissions and I'll give you feedback ASAP.

Thanks and I look forward to hearing your music!


Lee
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#4 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-06 21:52
Hi again Jake,

Also, as we’re getting started working together, please tell me a little about yourself, how you like to spend your time, what are your favorite things in school and out, and how long have you been involved in music and what instrument/s do you play? This will help me get more of a sense of who you are and how that relates to the music you compose.

Please let me know if you have any questions as I'm here to help in any way I can.

Best Wishes,

Lee
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#3 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-06 21:05
Dear Jake,

I hope you're doing well. I'm still not able to view your score and listen to it in Noteflight. Most likely you haven't set permission for us to view in Noteflight. Please follow these steps again and if it doesn't work, please check with your teacher and get their help:

1. Go into your Noteflight account. Click on this score. Make sure you can see the score on the screen.
2. Click on Connect button.
3. “Who can access this score” - select All site members
4.. Select All site members can View. Anyone can search/browse to find it.
5.. Save.

Let us know here when you've fixed the sharing permissions and I'll give you feedback ASAP.

Thanks and I look forward to hearing your music!


Lee
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#2 Lee Heuermann 2017-02-16 14:54
Dear Jake,

I’m so happy to meet you! I’ll be your mentor for Opus 32 through the month of April and Im very excited to get to know you and your music! I’m a composer and performer (voice, piano and flute) and love many kinds of music - classical, jazz, and especially music from India, Africa and Brazil. I live and teach in Berkeley, California.

Please follow Erik Nielson's steps so that I will be able to view your score in Noteflight. Let me know when you've done that and I'll get back to you with some comments but just wanted to say hello.


Thanks and so happy to be working with you,

Lee
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#1 Erik Nielsen 2017-02-14 10:54
Dear Jake,
I'm glad to see you've posted for Opus 32. Thanks for posting both an .xml and a .pdf file. Unfortunately we can't see your Notelight score. Try this and if that's not the answer you'll have to check in with your teacher.

You haven't set permission for us to view in Noteflight. Here are the steps to take to fix that:
1. Go into your Noteflight account. Click on this score. Make sure you can see the score on the screen.
2. Click on Connect button.
3. “Who can access this score” - select All site members
4.. Select All site members can View. Anyone can search/browse to find it.
5.. Save.

Let us know here when you've fixed the sharing permissions and we'll get mentor feedback for you.

In addition, you have some incorrect instrumentation for Opus 32. We do not have trumpet or trombone available. You could use oboe, clarinet or violin in place of trumpet. You could use bassoon or cello for trombone. We have all those instruments available. Please let me know if you have questions.

Best wishes,
Erik Nielsen
Senior Mentor
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