Mentoring Program

I am me and you are you

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mostly quarter and whole notes
Grade Level: 6
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: flute, violin, chello
Key: d mager
Meter Signature: 4-4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 32 grades 6-8

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#8 Rebecca Larkin 2017-04-07 11:59
Hi Samuel,

Thank you for submitting to Opus 32. Although your piece was not selected this year, I encourage you to continue writing and submit another piece in the near future.

I have enjoyed mentoring you, and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Best wishes,
Rebecca
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#7 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-23 12:59
Hi Samuel,

Just a friendly reminder that the Opus deadline is in a week!

Hope to hear from you soon,
Rebecca
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#6 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-19 16:51
Hi Samuel,

Here are a few quick suggestions:

1) The way your music is currently playing back at m. 13 is not how your music will actually sound in real life because you have not properly adjusted the dynamics. Add a piano or mezzo piano marking to the cello part at m. 13 to hear a better MIDI mix on the playback and let me know if you still like how it sounds.

2) You could vary up the scaler idea you have in the flute at m. 9. Maybe on beat three of that measure, the scale begins on G and on beat four it begins on A. This would add some harmony to your phrase. Also, you might consider giving the flute slurs for every four sixteenth notes in this phrase. The flute player can tongue each not if you would like, but slurs would match the articulation you give to the strings a few bars later.

3) Give the flute a higher dynamic marking at m. 17. With the dynamics and articulation you've already given the violin, it seems like you want that to be a more dramatic gesture, and having the flute dynamics match that feeling will help (Kind of like you are already doing at m. 19).

Please work on what I've mentioned above and let me know once you've done so. Happy composing!

Best,
Rebecca
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#5 samuel bransfields 2017-03-17 10:34
dear Rebecca i was wundering if i should add on to my piece at all.
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#4 samuel bransfields 2017-03-17 10:31
some of my ideas for my title were simpel but says a lot and the first thing that came to mind was I am me and you are you
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#3 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-07 22:52
Hey Samuel,

Have you made any updates to your piece since my last post? I'm also still interested in hearing the idea behind your title.

Those are good descriptive words. Another word I would add from listening to it just now is "intense." Would you agree?

I look forward to seeing more of your work. Please let me know once you've added more.

Best,
Rebecca
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#2 samuel bransfields 2017-02-20 10:43
Hi Rebecca the 5 descriptive words would be fast, energetic, happy, calm(at some points in time) joyful. I will try to do a difrent ps.sorry about my spelling
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#1 Rebecca Larkin 2017-02-09 21:23
Hi Samuel,

I'm Rebecca and I'll be your mentor for Opus 32.

You've got a lot of good material to work with already, and I'm enjoying how energizing your piece is in the rhythmic sections.

As we get started, could you tell me some more about your concept for this piece? Your title is interesting and seems to have a story or message attached to it. Can you give me five descriptive words for what you want your music to sound like?

As you keep composing, try to elaborate on some of the ideas you already have on the page. In the flute and cello at bars 4-7 you introduce this motive of two quarter notes, two eighth notes, and another quarter, I can see that you've used it again in the violin at measure 9. Try finding different note combinations that share this rhythm and experiment with using this idea throughout the piece (like you're already beginning to do with the flute and violin at measure 28). This would be a good way of unifying your piece through a recurring motive.

I hope this gives a good place to start. Let me know if you have any questions, and I'm looking forward to seeing where this piece goes!

Best,
Rebecca
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