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When Ships pass

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I piece for violin,viola, cello, and piano
Grade Level: 7
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Strings
Key: c Major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 32 grades 6-8


#7 Rebecca Larkin 2017-04-07 11:57
Hi Jasmin,

Thank you for submitting to Opus 32. Although your piece was not selected this year, I encourage you to continue writing and submit another piece in the near future.

I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Best wishes,
#6 Jasmin Townsend-Ng 2017-03-29 15:41
Hi Rebecca,

I have done some thinking, and I have been able to summarize my piece for you.

Title: When Ships Pass
Date: 1850
Place: Pacific Ocean

Scene: Out of the fog, two whaling ships meet each other while hunting for whales in the cold, and deep Pacific Ocean. They become suspicious about each other, and the tension builds. When they find out they don't mean harm to each other, they pass and disappear into the fog, to continue their agendas.

I hope this gives you a clear picture about how I see this piece.Here are the five descriptive words that describe my piece:


Thank you for the support of helping me with this piece
Best wishes Jazzy
#5 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-23 12:58
Hi Jasmin,

Just a friendly reminder that the Opus deadline is in a week!

Hope to hear from you soon,
#4 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-14 22:36
Hi Jasmin,

Ships passing would work, too. Are you going to change your title?

Also, could you please respond to my other question (about your five descriptive words)? The more I know about the piece you want to write, the better equipped I am to help you write it.

Have you added anything new to your piece since I last saw it? It doesn't seem as though you've made any changes. Keeping in mind the comments from my last post, please keep writing and let me know once you have (by posting here).

I'm looking forward to working with you on this.

#3 Jasmin Townsend-Ng 2017-03-09 17:39
I'm actually wanting When Ships pass, instead of fighting
#2 Sandi MacLeod 2017-03-04 10:20
Your mentor for Opus 32 is Rebecca Larkin. She wrote to you way back on February 10th to start the discussion. Now it's your turn.

Remember to view this work under Opus 32, grades 6-8, not your summer workshop version.

Looking forward to your updates.
#1 Rebecca Larkin 2017-02-10 01:07
Hi Jasmin,

I'm Rebecca and I'll be your mentor for Op.32.

You've got a lot of good material to work with already. I can picture a scene of two ships coming to battle.

I want to know more about your context for this piece. You seem to be setting up a story or mood that is related to the title of your piece. Can you tell me more about it? Can you also give me five descriptive words for what you want your music to sound like?

At measure 17, I like how you're giving each string instrument a solo, but I think you could make this section bigger. Try thinking of this section like a conversation. Right now, each line has a measure and a half of rest or more. If this is still supposed to sound like two ships fighting, then this conversation is too polite. Try finding a way for the solo lines to interweave with each other. They can still be sparse, but to use the conversation idea, maybe this is two people arguing. Another voice can interrupt the first voice at the end of it's sentence/phrase and continue with a their own idea. Experiment with this and see what you think.

I hope this gives a good place to start. Let me know if you have any questions, and I'm looking forward to seeing where this piece goes!


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