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Dance in the Moonlisgt

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This piece is about dancing in the moonlight. It is for string quartet.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: violin, viola, celo, bassl
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
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#2 Jake Lester 2017-04-04 16:17
Hi Claudia,

Thanks again for all the work you put into your piece. While it wasn't chosen for performance at Opus, that doesn't take away from all the effort you put into the piece, or the skill it takes to simply start a composition. You should feel proud of your work and I hope that you keep composing in the future. Don't give up!

-Jake
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#1 Jake Lester 2017-03-27 17:41
Hi Claudia,

My name is Jake and I'll be your mentor! I like the use of dynamics in your piece! You've included quite a bit of dynamic contrast and that's awesome to see. I also like how each instrument has its own chance to be in the spotlight.

Now, we don't have much time to work together on the piece, since the deadline is on Thursday, so what I'd like to do is give you some feedback on what I feel should be addressed immediately:

Make sure the sections of your piece have a clear home tone. I personally see your piece in two sections: measures 1-7 and measure 8 to the end. Neither section has an obvious home tone in the music right now. A home tone is the central note of a section of music - it's your center of gravity, so to speak! The music should be centered around this note, and pitches should move to and from this note, while still making it clear that the home tone is the center. In the first section of your piece, mm1-7, the home tone should be A, and that isn't coming through. You should adjust the music to make it clear that the note A is the most important note. In the second section, mm8-end, the home tone should be C. That comes through some of the time, but not enough. You should adjust various pitches in that section to make it obvious that C is the most important note.

You should remove the tempo change in the second measure. Having the performers start at one tempo and change in only the second measure of the piece will be very confusing for them. My advice would be to pick whichever tempo you prefer, and stick with it through your whole piece.

Thanks Claudia! Let's work hard and make sure you're ready by Thursday night!

-Jake
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