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Shadow River

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I'm going for a dramatic feel.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Violin, viola, cello, bass
Key: D
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title


#8 Rebecca Larkin 2017-04-07 12:04
Hi Anika,

Thank you for submitting to Opus 32. Although your piece was not selected this year, I encourage you to continue writing and submit another piece in the near future.

I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Best wishes,
#7 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-27 00:05
Hi Anika,

Sorry to hear that you had some trouble with the website, but happy that you figured it out!

So, is the last measure you've written what you're intending to use for an ending? If so, I think adding a crescendo to fortissimo under that last measure would be one way to make that more dramatic and effective.

Also, I'd like to see more of your violin line continuing past measure 12. That line is what I think lightens the mood of your piece and adds some variety in color (due to the timbre/sound of the register), and it would be nice to hear more of it. Try to keep it going until closer to when you cut the rest of your instruments out.

Try these suggestions and let me know what you think! Also, I understand we don't have much time before the Opus deadline, so I'll try to get back to you as soon as possible after you've made some changes.

Good luck!

- Rebecca
#6 Anika Turcotte 2017-03-24 11:32
Just FYI,
I added some dynamics in my piece because at some times I felt like I couldn't here the viola at times.
Tell me what you think!
#5 Anika Turcotte 2017-03-24 11:19
Yes, my main melody is measures 3-9.
Do you think I should repeat somewhere in there? Just so it kind of underlines that being my main melody?
#4 Anika Turcotte 2017-03-24 11:17
Hi, I'm sorry I haven't written sooner, I had some password issues.
I want my piece to start out kind of mellow, then build up, making it more and more dramatic and then the viola comes and lightens things up, (but only a little bit) and then it ends on a dramatic viola note.
I want it to wind around like a river, and then when the cello and viola start to play "solos" I want it to feel like you're hitting some rapids, and then at the slightly abrupt ending, It's like you went over a water fall and it's like you're suspended in mid air for a moment.
#3 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-23 13:05
Hi Anika,

Just a friendly reminder that the Opus deadline is in a week!

Hope to hear from you soon,
#2 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-19 21:17
Hi Anika,

Just checking in. Please write back soon. I'm looking forward to hearing from you!

#1 Rebecca Larkin 2017-02-28 00:53
Hi Anika,

I'm Rebecca and I'll be your mentor or Op. 32.

Nice start! I especially enjoyed your cello line. Is that your intended melody in the cello in measures 3-9? The idea of moving eighth notes is really effective, especially since you are portraying a river.

Could you tell me more about your intent for this piece? Your title implies that there was some kind of story or mood. What are five descriptive words you'd use to describe it?

I'll have more suggestions for you once you've answered these questions. I'm looking forward to working with you on this!


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