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viola and bass are best for this piece. the time signuter is 44 i was going for a bouncy hoppy sort of mood
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: viola and bass
Key: e minor
Meter Signature: 44
Tempo: 120
Status: Completed Work
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#7 Rebecca Larkin 2017-04-07 12:03
Hi Zoe,

Thank you for submitting to Opus 32. Although your piece was not selected this year, I encourage you to continue writing and submit another piece in the near future.

I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Best wishes,
Rebecca
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#6 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-26 23:52
Hi Zoe,

Thanks for getting back to me!

A few comments:

1) If your final instrumentation is going to be violin and bass, could you make this visible in your score?

2) I think the tempo should be either 120 or 100, but not both. Pick the one you like best and stick with that.

3) To continue writing, try coming up with a variation on your theme. A few simple suggestions for creating a variation on your theme would include adding more eighth notes and/or creating scale patterns between melodic notes more than a step a part from each other. For example, you could fill in the arpeggio at m. 22 in eighth notes. You could also change the "and" of beat 3 in measure 24 to a scale in sixteenth notes leading to the D on beat 4. Try experimenting with some of these ideas.

Good luck, and let me know if you have any questions!

Best,
Rebecca
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#5 Zoe Colvin 2017-03-24 11:16
hi Rebecca,
sorry for the late notice i will try to find a time to do this. i am eleven years old and in middle school. i love french bulldogs and all puppies and dogs. by the way thank you for the suggestions. i originally had it as a cello but i had to change it for one of my concerts. thanks for the understanding.
talk to you soon
Zoe
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#4 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-23 13:05
Hi Zoe,

Just a friendly reminder that the Opus deadline is in a week!

Hope to hear from you soon,
Rebecca
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#3 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-19 21:18
Hi Zoe,

Just checking in. Please write back soon. I'm looking forward to hearing from you!

Best,
Rebecca
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#2 Emily Luce 2017-03-06 11:04
Hi Zoe and Rebecca!

Just wanted to introduce myself and let you know that I'll be following along with your Opus composition! I am a music student at the University of Vermont and I'm so excited to hear what comes next! I like the mix of pizzicato and acro that you use. What is the meaning behind the title Cobwebs?

Emily
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#1 Rebecca Larkin 2017-02-28 00:45
Hi Zoe,

I'm Rebecca and I'll be your mentor for Opus 32.

Nice start! I especially enjoy the section where the two instruments start playing together in pizzicato.

A couple initial suggestions:
1) Especially since you've written 8va through most of the double bass part, I think that line would be better suited for a cello.
2) Try experimenting with slowing the tempo down. I think your piece would feel more comfortable/rel axed at 100 BPM instead of 120.

Were you thinking about making this piece longer? I think there is still a lot of room for your melody and motives to grow.

I'm looking forward to working with you on this piece!

Best,
Rebecca
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