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House Of Cards

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It's for cello and bass and I want the mood to be dark and spooky.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: cello and bass
Key: d
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: medium
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#9 Michael Close 2017-04-06 08:00
Hello Sarah,

I just wanted to congratulate you on all the progress you made with this piece. Even though it was not selected for Opus you should be very proud. There are so many submissions for the concert, it is impossible to present all the compositions that deserve a live performance. I hope to see you again on the mentoring site.

Best Wishes,

Mike Close
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#8 Sarah Greene 2017-03-30 11:14
Thanks Mike!
The ponticello sounded really cool and I changed the a. Also thanks for the link, I listened to it and it was great. Thank you for mentoring me and I hope my piece got chose!
Best Wishes,
Sarah Greene
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#7 Michael Close 2017-03-27 03:51
Hi Sarah,

There is actually a note that is too low- in measure 5 beat 4, you have a low A- the cello can only go as low as C.

It's my guess that ponticello will not play back in noteflight. You may just have to use your imagination until you are able to hear this in live performance. But you can hear examples online:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zJH2c4EFDLw.

Best Wishes,

Mike Close
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#6 Sarah Greene 2017-03-25 14:13
And sorry about the comment before this I skipped over the O.
Best Wishes,
Sarah Greene
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#5 Sarah Greene 2017-03-25 14:12
Hell Mike,
I tried the ponticello idea that you suggested but when I did the note didn't make any different noise :(. It would be great if you could please tell me how to fix that. And I changed the note that was to high.
Best wishes,
Sarah Greene
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#4 Michael Close 2017-03-25 07:37
Hi Sarah,

Its good to hear from you. Thank you for posting this revision. I'm glad to see you are experimenting with giving the cello pizz. and the bass the melody, but what I was actually suggesting was for you to give both instruments the opportunity to play arco and pizzicato over the course of the piece. So, perhaps the cello has the pizz. notes at the beginning and then half way through things switch and the bass has the pizz, while the cello plays arco.

I don't feel that this piece has to end here. You could keep it as it is and write more where the bass would play the pizzicato and the cello arco.

You might also consider writing a contrasting middle section where both instruments, for example, play spooky accented bowed tremolo notes. These might be marked "ponticello" which means played with the bow near the bridge- this gives the sound an icy, bone-chilling quality. - Just an idea...

Oh, watch out at m. 5- there is a cello note that is out of range- you've written a low A, and the cello can only go as low as C.

Keep up the good work!

Mike Close
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#3 Sarah Greene 2017-03-24 11:26
Hi Mike,
I switched the cello and bass parts and I like the way it sounds so much better! It sounds a lot spookier, just like I wanted it to. The bass starts out loud and then ends at mf and I think it makes it sound quite good. I really like you advice and the reason I was not on music comp was because my computer didn't let me go onto the page.
Best wishes,
Sarah Greene
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#2 Michael Close 2017-03-23 05:21
Hello Sarah,

I was wondering how your piece was coming along. I haven't heard from you in quite a while. The deadline for final submissions for Opus 32 is next Thursday.

Best Wishes,

Mike Close
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#1 Michael Close 2017-03-02 07:48
Hi Sarah,

I enjoyed hearing your piece. It certainly has an ominous, spooky sound to it.

Have you considered switching the roles of the two instruments?- giving the cello the steady pizz. quarter notes and the bass the moving line?

There are lots of repeated forte markings in the cello part- you only need one forte marking until the dynamic changes. What dynamic level is the bass at?

I think you might also consider shaping the cello line a bit with crescendos / decrescendos. What it each time the cello came in it started piano and then crescendoed to a accented forte on the sixteenth note? Or maybe cello starts loud and then dies away?

I look forward to hearing what you come up with next! Keep up the good work!

Mike Close
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