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Ocean Diving - Opus 32

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Ocean diving is meant to sound like the ocean. It has that flowing sound that you might hear at the ocean. The instruments that I used for this piece are the violin, oboe and cello. Then, at the minor part, it is meant to sound like sharks, box jellyfish, and all of the other fierce beings of the ocean. It is in the key of F major and flows like water. Like the ocean!! The reason I wanted to write this piece is because I love water, and I wanted to write a piece that was about what I love!
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Oboe, violin, cello
Key: F major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#26 Gabby Guidry 2017-04-09 07:43
Thanks Rebecca, but, I am moving away, so I am not sure i will be entering Opus again. This was kind of like my first and last time entering. Thanks so much for all of your help.

Bye,
Gabby
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#25 Rebecca Larkin 2017-04-07 12:02
Hi Gabby,

Thank you for submitting to Opus 32. Although your piece was not selected this year, I encourage you to continue writing and submit another piece in the near future.

I have enjoyed mentoring you and I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Best wishes,
Rebecca
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#24 Gabby Guidry 2017-04-01 18:35
Thank you so much Rebecca!
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#23 Gabby Guidry 2017-03-30 09:48
Rebecca,
I think I am done.
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#22 Gabby Guidry 2017-03-29 18:41
Thanks Rebecca! I think that I am good, but I will go through it 1 more time, and fix any errors.

- Gabby
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#21 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-26 23:33
Hi Gabby,

1) Continue your cello accompaniment in measure 41! Another eighth note pattern similar to that of measure 39 would work well.

2) Make sure that you specify dynamic changes for each section. For instance, you mark the viola at fortissimo at the beginning, but you don't give the oboe and cello a marking when they enter at measure 5. Double check for places like that and add dynamics accordingly. Another area with a similar problem is the oboe at measure 51. You address the cello and viola dynamics a few measures earlier, but you don't mark a dynamic change in the oboe when it enters (and I'm assuming that you want the oboe to be louder than piano there).

Keep up the good work, and let me know if you have any questions!

Best,
Rebecca
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#20 Gabby Guidry 2017-03-23 15:52
I will work on my piece even more soon! :)
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#19 Gabby Guidry 2017-03-23 15:51
Rebecca,
Thanks so much. I did as much as I could.
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#18 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-23 12:56
Hi Gabby,

Cool. I look forward to seeing what you come up with for those cello measures I mentioned before.

A couple of suggestions:

1) I think it sounds fine as is, but have you thought about dropping the viola down an octave at m. 25 (since you decided to lower the cello already)? You could see how you like that.

2) Look back through what you've written and think more about articulation. Do you want each note to be rearticulated? Or maybe some should be slurred? Do you want to use accents to show that some notes are heavier than others? I love the staccato marks you added for the cello at m.45, but that is the only time you've used articulation so far, and there is definitely room for some more. Try adding some, and I can help you figure out what works and what doesn't.

Just a friendly reminder that the Opus deadline is in a week. Keep up the good work, and I'm looking forward to seeing your progress!

Best,
Rebecca
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#17 Gabby Guidry 2017-03-23 09:44
Rebecca,
I am going to keep working on the measures that you said tonight.

Gabby
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