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The Snowstorm - Opus 32

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"The Snowstorm" is a piano and cello duet, in the key of C. This piece describes the different speeds of a snowstorm.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Cello, Piano
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 150
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#12 Erik Nielsen 2017-04-03 15:12
Dear Ellis,
Thanks for entering your piece for Opus 32. Unfortunately, it was not chosen for performance. However, I congratulate you on the work you put into it. I enjoyed mentoring you, and encourage you to keep composing. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#11 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-30 11:02
Dear Ellis,
Thanks for re-posting with the final version of your duet. I'm glad you got rid of the repeat signs and that you added to the ending. As for dynamics, do keep in mind in the future that you are relying on the computer to make choices for you after the opening dynamic. You can't expect players to keep the music at the same exact dynamic level throughout a piece because they aren't machines, so making some more dynamic choices is important.
Congratulations on your work. I hope you have learned something about the composition process and look forward to seeing more of your work in the future.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#10 Ellis Johnson 2017-03-30 09:48
Hi Erik
Thank you for the suggestion on the dynamics.
But I would like to keep it the way it is.
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#9 Ellis Johnson 2017-03-30 09:38
Hi Erik
I think I am done.
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#8 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-24 11:13
Dear Ellis,
Thanks for posting the latest version of your duet for cello and piano. It's clear you've worked quite a bit on this. I like the cello solo you've added in bars 25-30. That's the sort of thing I had in mind when I asked you to give the cello more to do.
We only have a week until the deadline, so I'll try to keep this simple.
1. How about getting both the piano left hand and cello involved to make a stronger final 3 bars? The music just peters out at the end.
2. Having a single dynamic mark is better than none, but changing the dynamics in different part of the piece will be even better.
3. Yes, get rid of the repeats.

Ellis, this piece has come a long way since the last posting. Keep working, if possible outside class, and let me know if you have questions. Remember that the deadline is next Thursday.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#7 Ellis Johnson 2017-03-23 09:48
Hi Erik,
Today I worked on my biography and description, and added an opening dynamic which is good for the whole piece. I will change the repeat signs next week, as you wrote.
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#6 Erik Nielsen 2017-03-22 15:03
Dear Ellis,
I know you and your classmates only meet on Thursdays, but I just want to let you know that final versions of Opus 32 works are due by midnight next Thursday, March 30. Please let me know if you have questions. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#5 Erik Nielsen 2017-02-16 10:20
Dear Ellis,
Thanks for posting the new version of your duet. I think it's interesting that both you and your brother created duets for cello and piano, but they're very different from each other. I'll be your primary mentor for this piece.
I like how lively your piece is. It's certainly full of lots of ideas. I particularly like bars 3-4 where the piano right hand and the left hand (and cello) go in opposite directions.
I have a few suggestions.
1. I think what you have before bar 22 is enough musical material for one piece and is also more successful than what comes after it. Please think about what you can do to develop your ideas more, such as modified repeats, giving the piano right hand material to cello sometimes, having the melodic ideas get imitated (echoed) in another part, etc.
2. Speaking of repeats, I don't think all those repeat signs really add anything to the piece. I can see repeating one or two ideas and maybe echoing them the second time (that is, f the first time, p the second), but not just exact repeats.
3. Work to give the cello more independence. At the moment it's just mirroring the left hand of the piano a great deal of the time. Think about the things I've written for #1 above and try some things out.
Ellis, you have some interesting musical ideas here. Now if you can work on what I've suggested, your piece ought to develop. Please let me know if you have questions. I look forward to your next posting.

Best wishes,
Erik
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#4 Alli Lubin 2017-02-12 10:21
https://mflms-tgs.learning.noteflight.com/scores/view/25c2e9ae6d215344847c5fa63a8f5d86f06ecb7c
This is the link the new version of Ellis' piece.
Ellis, can you edit your Description and put this new link in the correct field?
Also, please edit your instrumentation to read Cello, Piano
Let me know if you need help.
Alli
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#3 Alli Lubin 2017-02-10 15:01
Hi,
I'm Ellis's music teacher following his progress.
Thanks,
Alli Lubin
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