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Father Bear

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I made it with lots of repeats so it would be long.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano
Key: F major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 115
Status: Completed Work
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#15 Lee Heuermann 2017-04-04 15:29
Dear Ezra,

Thanks for entering your piece, “Father Bear” for Opus 32. Unfortunately, it was not chosen for performance. However, I congratulate you on the work you put into it. I think you had some interesting ideas here! I’ve really enjoyed mentoring you, and encourage you to keep composing. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future and hope to work with you again. Please let me know if you have any questions.

Best wishes,

Lee
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#14 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-30 15:43
Dear Ezra,

Yay! Great job in getting that done! Now it really looks like a piano score!

Here are a few more details to change if you can:

m. 10 - RH piano - a note naturally decays in volume so can’t crescendo here (delete the cresc.)
m. 42 - same
m. 56 - same
m. 78 - same
m. 88 - same

in these measures your dynamic signs are bumping other notes - move them so they don’t bump - you want your score to look neat!
m. 38 - ff bumping
m. 43 - crescendo bumping
mms. 47 - 48 - same
mms. 65-68 - same
m. 89 - cresc bumping
mms. 92 - 93 - same

delete tempo mark at the end


Good Luck Ezra and I think you really have an interesting piece here! Terrific job! If you have any other questions let me know,


Lee
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#13 Betsy Greene 2017-03-30 11:15
Lee,
Thanks for those new tips. I made some of those changes to my piece (this is my last change).

Thank you for all your help.

Ezra-
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#12 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-29 18:16
Hello Ezra,

This is just a reminder that you must have your piece ready to submit to be considered for the Opus 32 concert by tomorrow, Thursday, 3/30/17.

This is important Ezra:
“For your piano part you should always use the grand staff as piano is for both right and left hand - treble clef for right hand (as you have) and bass clef for the left hand. Those lowest notes (D, F Bb, C, D, F, Bb, C ) should be written in bass clef and played with the left hand. If you had them hold out through the measure or until the next low note plays it could add a nice harmony. These bass notes seem important as they sound like your title of “Father Bear”. Also, even if you only have the right hand playing you would write rests in the left hand part. Look at some piano music to see how the bracket joins the treble and bass clefs to the left of the staff.

You might want to make sure you’ve added details like:

Dynamics (volume)
Please add dynamic markings (volume) such as forte (f), piano (p) or mezzo forte (mf), and crescendo or decrescendos throughout.

Articulations (legato, staccato, accent marks)
If you don’t write these in throughout the piece everything will be played detached, so if you want it to flow - use slurs for legato (flowing) or if you want it detached and short sounding use staccato. For accented attacks use accent marks. If you don’t put anything in (and sometimes you may want this) each note is played somewhat separated from the next.

Descriptive markings
In the beginning and at different points in your piece if the mood changes, you can use words to describe what you want, such as “sparkling” , “lively”, or whatever words you think best describe your piece and how you want it played. This really helps the performers and especially when there’s not a lot of rehearsal time this really helps the performers to understand what you want as the composer. Be specific!

You’re on the home stretch! Good Luck and let me know if you have any questions!


Lee
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#11 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-25 09:28
Hi Ezra,

I hope you’re doing well! Thanks for changing the repeat signs and writing it all out! You’re getting closer to done, but you’re not quite done yet! When writing for piano, you will need to put your piece into the grand staff - as piano always shows that it’s for two hands. See my earlier comment from February 13th:

“For your piano part you should always use the grand staff as piano is for both right and left hand - treble clef for right hand (as you have) and bass clef for the left hand. Those lowest notes (D, F Bb, C, D, F, Bb, C ) should be written in bass clef and played with the left hand. If you had them hold out through the measure or until the next low note plays it could add a nice harmony. These bass notes seem important as they sound like your title of “Father Bear”. Also, even if you only have the right hand playing you would write rests in the left hand part. Look at some piano music to see how the bracket joins the treble and bass clefs to the left of the staff.

On the Music-COMP website you can go to the Resources tab at the top, and click on “More Resources for Student Composers”, for info on composing for the piano.”

In your right hand (RH) of the piano part where you move the low notes into
the LH (bass clef on the grand staff) you’ll need a rest there in the RH part.
Also, you could sometimes double your LH bass clef low notes and play an octave which would give it even more of a big bear sound.

Also, if you put it all into the Grand Staff your dynamics (volume - crescendo and decrescendo signs) won’t bump into other notes. After you enter the low notes into the bass clef go back and check your dynamic markings to make sure they’re not hitting other notes.

Also, I only see one F forte marking. Please add more dynamics aside from the Cresc. and decresc. markings.

One other thing you might add to give it a bit more variety is to add articulations (accents, legato and staccatos) and also you might want to use the pedal in places. But I could especially here accents on certain notes. What do you think?


Please let me know if you have any questions! Good luck here in the home stretch!



Lee
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#10 Betsy Greene 2017-03-23 14:48
thanks Lee, This is my final draft and I am ready to submit.

Thank you for all your help.

Ezra
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#9 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-23 14:44
Dear Ezra Jack,

How’s everything going with your composing? I'll get back to you very soon to answer your questions, but I just wanted to check in with you and to remind you that you’re in the home stretch. You need to have your final draft of your composition ready by one week from today, Thursday, March 30th.

We will then select the pieces that will be performed on the Opus 32 concert. If your piece is selected, we will then work together on polishing all of the details for the final submission of your score to give to the performers.

Let me know if you have any questions and how I can help you, and please work hard to get things ready by next Thursday, 3/30.



Thanks and keep up the good work!


Lee
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#8 Betsy Greene 2017-03-23 14:22
Here is the composition that Father Bear is based off of. Baby Bear: https://mflms-bsdk5.learning.noteflight.com/scores/view/d61cbe56f585a28cbdffc2bcfa73261de56af988
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#7 Betsy Greene 2017-03-23 13:58
Hi Lee

Sorry, I could not get on.

I am getting close to being done do you have anymore advise?

last year I played the cello, and did not have a the time this year.

I like the game Dungeons and Dragons, but I do not play very often.
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#6 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-06 21:46
Hi Ezra Jack,

I hope you're doing well! You're very welcome for the tips and I'm really glad you enjoyed the videos. I haven't heard back from you in awhile and want to check in and see how you're doing with "Father Bear"?

Also, as we’re getting started working together, please tell me a little about yourself, how you like to spend your time, what are your favorite things in school and out, and how long have you been involved in music and what instrument/s do you play? This will help me get more of a sense of who you are and how that relates to the music you compose.

Please let me know if you have any questions as I'm here to help in any way I can.

Best Wishes,

Lee
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