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I have cello and viola in my piece. I am hoping to have some pizz. in the cello piece.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Cello, Viola
Key: D major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
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#6 Michael Close 2017-04-06 07:58
Hello Meg,

I just wanted to congratulate you on all the progress you made with this piece. Even though it was not selected for Opus you should be very proud. There are so many submissions for the concert, it is impossible to present all the compositions that deserve a live performance. I hope to see you again on the mentoring site.

Best Wishes,

Mike Close
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#5 Michael Close 2017-03-30 08:21
Hi Meg,

I like the eighth notes you added- they make the pizz. parts more exciting- nice work.

I'm concerned with the opening measure- the parts are dissonant together- beat one- F# vs G, beat 2-3 E vs D. Maybe try moving the entire viola part in m. 1 up a step so it starts on G rather than F#. I also wonder if you considered the suggestion of having the cello play pizz. for the first 7 measures while the viola plays arco- as it is, I have a difficult time deciding who is melody and who is accompaniment, which is disconcerting at the beginning of a piece.

Keep up the good work!

Mike Close
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#4 Meg Voisin 2017-03-29 16:08
I've added some eighth notes and I have added a few other small things. Hope you like it!!! :)
- Meg
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#3 Michael Close 2017-03-22 09:43
Hi Meg,

I really enjoyed listening to this latest version of your piece. You've done a good job bringing the melodic lines to the forefront by making the accompanying part pizz.

The opening still sounds muddled to me- I don't know where the melody is. Maybe try having the cello play pizz. from the very start and the viola stays arco at least to m. 8 where they would switch.


At m. 5 you have some unnecessary naturals on D and G- those notes are already natural in this key. I'm not sure about the sound of the F natural on beat 3- it is quite dissonant and out of character with the rest of the piece.

You are doing great! The final version needs to be posted by next Thursday. Keep up the good work.

Mike Close
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#2 Meg Voisin 2017-03-21 16:34
I added some pizz. I'm going to put in some eighth notes in the cello pizz. part.
-Meg
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#1 Michael Close 2017-02-13 11:19
Hello Meg,

I really enjoyed listening to this.

I feel like I don't really know where the melody is. My ear is drawn to the viola part in measure 1, but then it switches to pizz. which puts the emphasis on the cello.

I like measures 4-5 where there is contrast between the parts- the viola plays higher sustained notes, the cello has lower moving notes.

Too often the two instruments are competing for attention, playing in the same range with no one really taking the lead melodically.

Pizzicato is a wonderful way to put a voice more in the melodic background however, you switch back and forth between arco and pizz. seemingly willynilly. Perhaps try making the cello pizz. for all the music you have so far and the viola arco the whole time- then they can switch roles as you go on. This will make the viola the melodic leader in this section and the cello more clearly accompanimental.

Also, you are using a very limited range in both instruments. For example, The cello can play easily from below the bass staff up to the middle of the treble staff. As you go forward, you can use the different registers of the instruments to make parts stand-out or contrast.

I very much look forward to hearing what you come up with next. Keep up the good work!

Mike Close
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