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Coolness

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This piece is written for violin, Piano and Oboe. I am thinking about adding a clarinet. I want this piece to be easy to listen to. The melody is in the violin and the other parts are to support that. I would like feedback about what the form should be and how/ where I might add a new section. Any other suggestions would be nice. :)
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Violin, piano, oboe, clarinet?
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#18 Lee Heuermann 2017-04-04 15:26
Dear Quinn,

Thanks for entering your piece, “Coolness” for Opus 32. Unfortunately, it was not chosen for performance. However, I congratulate you on the work you put into it. I’ve really enjoyed mentoring you, and encourage you to keep composing. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future and hope to work with you again.
Please let me know if you have any questions.

Best wishes,

Lee
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#17 Quinn Shelley 2017-03-31 10:32
Yes, I do want that part on the piano and even if I didn't it's to late now so I'm glad that it wasn't a mistake
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#16 Quinn Shelley 2017-03-31 10:30
I wanted to be able to here the viola but still here the violin a bit so I made it quieter.
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#15 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-30 16:15
Dear Quinn,

You are so very welcome and I have so enjoyed working with you. Terrific job on your revisions! Your piece sounds so vibrant and joyful! I really appreciate your generous attitude about being happy for anyone from your school to win. Having an attitude like that makes everything a win/win situation!

Here are a few details to tend to:

m. 4 - Do you really want the violin to be mp here when everyone else is f or did you mean for the other parts to come down in volume as well? Remember you have to mark volume changes in every part.

m. 8 - 2nd ending - do you want an F in the RH piano part on that ending C chord? The F (4th) adds a dissonance (against the E). I personally kind of like it but wasn’t sure whether you wanted it or not?


Please don’t hesitate to ask any questions and Good Luck!


Lee
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#14 Quinn Shelley 2017-03-30 11:47
Hi lee,
Here are my final changes to "Coolness". Thank you for all your help. I am psyched to here all the pieces performed at the concert. I hope someone from my school is selected, even if it's not me and I hope you like my revisions.
Thanks again,
Quinn
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#13 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-29 17:05
Dear Quinn,

Nice job on your piece and getting the changes in. The only other things you might want to add are:

Articulations (legato, staccato, accent marks)
If you don’t write these in throughout the piece everything will be played detached, so if you want it to flow - use slurs for legato (flowing) or if you want it detached and short sounding use staccato. For accented attacks use accent marks. If you don’t put anything in (and sometimes you may want this) each note is played somewhat separated from the next.

Descriptive markings
In the beginning and at different points in your piece if the mood changes, you can use words to describe what you want, such as “sparkling” , “lively”, or whatever words you think best describe your piece and how you want it played. This really helps the performers and especially when there’s not a lot of rehearsal time this really helps the performers to understand what you want as the composer. Be specific!

You’re almost done Quinn! Remember to get your changes in by tomorrow, Thursday, 3/30/17.


Let me know if you have any questions!



Lee
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#12 Quinn Shelley 2017-03-29 13:21
I changed the repeated notes and I think that's better. I also changed the piano whole notes to quarters.
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#11 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-24 16:06
Hi Quinn,

Nice job! Your first and second ending repeat look good!

In terms of the order of parts in your score, again, they should be from top to borttom:

Oboe
Clarinet
Violin
Viola
Piano

Here’s how you can change the order of these parts:

In the upper part of the toolbar is a stringed instrument logo, with "instruments" written under it (it stands for the instrument menu). Click on it and the instruments show up in the vertical order of the score. You can either drag an instrument up or down to re-position it, or click on the little dotted rectangle to the left of the name. When you do that, arrows show up for all the other instruments and if you click on the arrows, you can move the particular part up or down, leapfrogging the part above or below it, depending on what direction it needs to go. It's really pretty easy. Let me know whether this helps.

Quinn, thank you for changing some of the repeated notes to held notes - I see you did that in the RH piano part, 2nd measures - notes E then C. However, (and I hope I’m not confusing you) but because on the piano a held note dies out faster than a held note on the oboe, clarinet, violin or viola (with these instruments, with the oboe and clarinet the breath sustains the tone, and with the violin and viola the bow sustains the tone longer) I think it would be better to sustain some of the repeated notes on those instruments instead of piano:

For instance - the oboe- mms. 1-3 and 5.

Now you may disagree with me, and as the composer, you may want those repeated notes, so let me know what you think.

In m. 5 of the oboe part I think either the D or B on the first beat is a mistake, so remove one of them please.

Also Quinn, why don’t you try adding a left hand (bass clef) to the piano part in mms. 4-6.


Let me know if you have any questions!


Lee
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#10 Quinn Shelley 2017-03-23 18:03
oh,sorry I meant the 1-2 ending. Is that how you write it? I'm not sure.
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#9 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-23 14:41
Dear Quinn,

How’s everything going with your composing? I'll get back to you very soon to answer your other questions, but what do you mean by the "half part"? Do you mean putting the piano part in the "grand staff", with both treble and bass clefs? Let me know please.

I just wanted to check in with you and to remind you that you’re in the home stretch. You need to have your final draft of your composition ready by one week from today, Thursday, March 30th.

We will then select the pieces that will be performed on the Opus 32 concert. If your piece is selected, we will then work together on polishing all of the details for the final submission of your score to give to the performers.

Let me know if you have any questions and how I can help you, and please work hard to get things ready by next Thursday, 3/30.



Thanks and keep up the good work!


Lee
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