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Lilly Pond

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This is a solo piece for violin. I would like feedback about making the rhythm more interesting. There are some parts that sound weird. I'd like help making them sound better.
Grade Level: 4
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Violin
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
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#5 Lee Heuermann 2017-04-04 15:33
Dear Gretchen,

Thanks for entering your piece, “Lily Pond” for Opus 32. Unfortunately, it was not chosen for performance. However, I congratulate you on the work you put into it. I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future. Please let me know if you have any questions.


Best wishes,


Lee
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#4 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-29 18:18
Hello Gretchen,

This is just a reminder that you must have your piece ready to submit to be considered for the Opus 32 concert by tomorrow, Thursday, 3/30/17.

You might want to make sure you’ve added details like:

Dynamics (volume)
Please add dynamic markings (volume) such as forte (f), piano (p) or mezzo forte (mf), and crescendo or decrescendos throughout.

Articulations (legato, staccato, accent marks)
If you don’t write these in throughout the piece everything will be played detached, so if you want it to flow - use slurs for legato (flowing) or if you want it detached and short sounding use staccato. For accented attacks use accent marks. If you don’t put anything in (and sometimes you may want this) each note is played somewhat separated from the next.

Descriptive markings
In the beginning and at different points in your piece if the mood changes, you can use words to describe what you want, such as “sparkling” , “lively”, or whatever words you think best describe your piece and how you want it played. This really helps the performers and especially when there’s not a lot of rehearsal time this really helps the performers to understand what you want as the composer. Be specific!

You’re on the home stretch! Good Luck and let me know if you have any questions!


Lee
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#3 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-23 14:45
Dear Gretchen,

How’s everything going with your composing? I just wanted to check in with you and to remind you that you’re in the home stretch. You need to have your final draft of your composition ready by one week from today, Thursday, March 30th.

We will then select the pieces that will be performed on the Opus 32 concert. If your piece is selected, we will then work together on polishing all of the details for the final submission of your score to give to the performers.

Let me know if you have any questions and how I can help you, and please work hard to get things ready by next Thursday, 3/30.



Thanks and keep up the good work!


Lee
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#2 Lee Heuermann 2017-03-06 21:32
Hi Gretchen,

I hope you're doing well! I haven't heard back from you and want to check in and see how you're doing with "Lily Pond"?

Also, as we’re getting started working together, please tell me a little about yourself, how you like to spend your time, what are your favorite things in school and out, and how long have you been involved in music and what instrument/s do you play? This will help me get more of a sense of who you are and how that relates to the music you compose.

Please let me know if you have any questions as I'm here to help in any way I can.

Best Wishes,

Lee
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#1 Lee Heuermann 2017-02-10 11:38
Dear Gretchen,

I’m so happy to meet you! I’ll be your mentor for Opus 32 through the month of April and Im very excited to get to know you and your music! I’m a composer and performer (voice, piano and flute) and love many kinds of music - classical, jazz, and especially music from India, Africa and Brazil. I live and teach in Berkeley, California.

I really like the beginnings of your composition, Lilly Pond. I think you’re right to want to work on your rhythm to spruce it up a little bit as it’s mostly only quarter notes (accept for your opening half note). For starters, why don’t you try and listen to some water flowing and hear what it sounds like and see if it gives you any ideas. You could run some water in a bathtub and take a notebook and pencil, and while you listen to it filling up, write down in words what it sounds like. When you turn the water off, do you still hear any sounds from the water? Drop a bar of soap in it and listen to the splash and what it sounds like as it ripples out. Then see if you could write maybe two rhythmic patterns that it sounds like.

Also, maybe take that same notebook and just write in words a bit about what you imagine a lilly pond sounds like - not just any lilly pond, but your lilly pond - the one in your imagination. What do you want it to sound like? You might think about adding some eighth notes to make it flow faster, or even sixteenth notes to speed it up more. If you have a repeated note you could possibly tie it or make it a half note (measure 8 - E). Will your pond always flow the same or do you want it to speed up and slow down?

I like the shape or contour of your melody for violin. Your melodic line goes up through m. (for measure) 3, then back down in m. 4, then back up then down again in mms. 5-6, then rising up again in mms. 7-9, then ripples down in mms. 11-12.

Let me know what you write down about your lilly pond and what it makes you think of.


Thanks,

Lee

(My first name is Beryl but I go by my middle name, Lee)
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