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Tess opus33

Composer Name: Tess Bernadette Ewoldsen
iMy piece rises and falls like a wave
Grade Level: 4
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: piano
Key: C major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 33 Grades 2-5

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#3 Lee Heuermann 2018-02-25 02:28
Hi Tess,

Nice job working on your ending. I like it and it seems to clearly be ending in a minor.

I have some suggestions:

In m. 2, make the F in the bass clef a whole note and move the G on beat 3 (bass clef) into the right hand (treble clef)

In m.3 move the C in beat 1 (bass clef) into the R.H. (treble clef).

In m. 5 make the C in the bass clef a whole note and get rid of the G (it’s doubling the RH G).

In m. 7 get rid of the LH B (beat 1) because it’s doubling the B in the RH

In m. 6 have the A and D chord on the 3rd beat bass clef tie into the next measure to a half note and then on the third beat of m. 7 have that chord resolve to an A and E chord (which is a minor, along with the C in the treble clef).

In mms. 10 and 11 have the LH high notes go into treble clef and back to the bass clef on beat 3 (m. 11).

Please make these changes and let me know what you think.


Thanks,

Lee
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#2 Tess ewoldsen 2018-02-19 14:48
dear Lee,
Thank you for your help!
I could not do all of it but i worked really hard on
the ending so that was my main thing!
and by the way you can call me Tess!
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#1 Lee Heuermann 2018-02-07 16:51
Dear Tess,

I’m so happy to meet you! Would you like me to call you Tess or Bernadette or both? I’ll be your mentor for Opus 33 and I’m very excited to get to know you and your music! I’m a composer and performer (voice, piano and flute) and love many kinds of music - classical, jazz, and especially music from India, Africa and Brazil. I live and teach in Berkeley, California. I feel especially exited because right now I am writing to you from Trinidad, which is a small country and island to the south of Venezuela. I am here for their Carnival and to learn more about their wonderful Calypso music. I will return in about 1 week but will be able to receive your music postings here.

Nice beginning to your piano piece Tess! I like your opening theme in measures (mms.) 1-2, which is like the “question” part of a musical phrase. Your 2 voices in the right hand and the left hand harmonize very nicely. Mms. 3-5 seem like the “answer” of the musical phrase. I like your idea of using the chromatic scale (by half steps) and it being such a different sound than the first two measures. However, it seems so different that it may not quite fit yet.

Two possibilities could be that:

1) either you spend more time developing your first idea (mms. 1-2) and then move into something chromatic

or

You build your piece on a “question and answer” phrasing where they are two contrasting ideas - the question very tonal and the answer very chromatic, which sounds more like you’re wandering.

I hear your falling wave idea which is nice.

in the left hand, rather than have so many notes above the staff on ledger lines, you should just move the left hand into treble clef on the 3rd beat of m. 2, then back to bass clef on the 3rd beat of m. 3. Then back to trebel clef from the 3rd beat of m.5.

On the Music-COMP website - go to the “Resources” tab, then select “More Resources for Student Composers”.

Check out the “Composing for the Piano” and the “Piano Podcast Here”.

As we’re getting started working together, please tell me a little about yourself, how you like to spend your time, what are your favorite things in school and out, and how long have you been involved in music and what instrument/s do you play? This will help me get more of a sense of who you are and how that relates to the music you compose.

I can’t wait to see what you do next and great job so far!


Lee
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