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Composer Name: Arlo Moses
It is a piano duet with a bass drum harmony.
Grade Level: 8
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: 2 Pianos and a bass drum
Key: C major
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120 bpm
Status: Work in Progress
Noteflight URL: Website Title
Located in: Opus 33 Grades 6-8

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#6 Travis Ramsey 2018-02-23 19:21
Hi Arlo, how's the writing process coming along? Anything I can help you with?
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#5 Arlo Moses 2018-02-20 14:22
Okay thank you, I will fix that and make sure that the trumpet part is playable.
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#4 Travis Ramsey 2018-02-13 20:30
Sounds good! Remember as you change to trumpet that a comfortable range for it to spend most of its time is anywhere on the staff. It doesn't sound too great below low D and C and the players will tire quickly if you write above top-space E for too long. A few notes in the F or G range up there are fine but not a whole lot! Let me know when you have added trumpet and gone down to one piano part.
Also, do you know how to write chords in their "inversions?" If not let me know and I can tell you all about it. It's much easier on the piano player than lifting the wrist to hop around to play those left hand chords, and it gives a much smoother sound.

Good luck!

T
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#3 Arlo Moses 2018-02-13 14:22
Okay, thank you! I will fix the piano part to change to a trumpet and will fix the beat and rhythm.
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#2 Travis Ramsey 2018-02-04 20:22
Hi Arlo,

I'm Travis. I'll be mentoring you throughout the Opus 33 project. I'm looking forward to hearing what you think about Erik's comment. If you're interested in advice, I'd suggest that you do whatever you can to make this piece eligible for Opus. Being able to hear it live is an amazing thing. What do you think of (one) piano, trumpet, and bass drum?
Also, I just wanted to share some highlights from what I have heard in your piece. Overall it has all the things that make for a great song. It has several different ideas, some fast and some slow, some with just melodies and some with nice chords. My favorite moment in the whole piece is the last measure on page 4, when the 16th note melody takes over. The repetition is good and the melody is very memorable. I like the ending, too. It leaves us with a questioning feeling when you decided not to end on C, but in D minor.

A few things I would like to offer my help with are these: From a rhythm perspectieve, you use a lot of syncopation. At places like pages 4-5 it works very well. At other places I lose the beat when I listen. I'd like to help keep the pulse from dropping away when the rhythm gets interesting.
Also you use a lot of very fast notes moving up and down the keyboard. I think we could work on having the majority of these movements outline chords. It helps the listener identify with what you're writing.
Do you have any questions for me as you continue writing and working on this? All in all this is a very encouraging start and I can't wait to see it take shape!

Travis
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#1 Erik Nielsen 2018-01-31 09:17
Dear Arlo,
Thanks for posting the first version of your piece, and welcome to Music-COMP and the world of online composing.
You've included your piece in our Opus 33 folder, so I need to let you know that we only have a single piano available for the concert. However, your two piano parts can be combined pretty easily into a single part without losing much of anything. There are a number of places where the parts alternate or duplicate each other, and very few where they are both active at the same time. So combining the two piano parts into a single one wouldn't be that difficult if you chose to do it.
The other possibility is to take one of the piano parts and spread out the notes over several brass instruments. That will involve a bit more work and will mean eliminating some notes from a few chords, but it is also possible.
One final possibility if you really want to keep the instrumentation you have is to remove it from the Opus competition completely. If you let us know that's what you want to do we'll still mentor you (no worries there), but the piece will be put in our Independent Projects folder.
So please give this some thought and once you re-post, let us know what you've decided to do so we know. Then you and your mentor can get to work together. Please let me know if you have questions.

Best wishes,
Erik Nielsen
Senior Mentor
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