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Cats in the Dark

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It´s a duet with Piano and Violin, the piece is trying to make it sound like the Piano and Violin are fighting.
Grade Level: 5
Intended For: Live Instrument Performance
Software Used: Noteflight
Instrumentation: Piano and Violin
Key: C
Meter Signature: 4/4
Tempo: 120
Status: Completed Work
Noteflight URL: Website Title

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#11 Rebecca Larkin 2017-04-07 12:05
Hi Miranda,

Thank you for submitting to Opus 32. Although your piece was not selected this year, I encourage you to continue writing and submit another piece in the near future.

I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Best wishes,
Rebecca
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#10 Miranda Bertrand 2017-03-30 15:34
Hi Rebecca,
I think the ending is fit for my title and I think I like it better having the long ending, I like the piece just like it is, I hope you do to,
How do you submit your music?
Sincerely,
Miranda
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#9 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-30 12:04
Hi Miranda,

Are you planning on changing the ending like we discussed?

As far as dynamics go, you still need marks like piano, mezzo piano, forte, etc. The hairpins are good, but aren't very useful to a performer without the other marks.

Once you've fixed those couple of things, I think you're all set. Best of luck!

- Rebecca
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#8 Miranda Bertrand 2017-03-30 08:52
Hi Rebecca,
I made the changes, and It makes it sound better than last time and very professional
Sincerely,
Miranda
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#7 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-29 13:25
Hi Miranda,

Since my last posting, you've added quite a few measures towards the end of your piece that would be hard for the violinist especially. I'd suggest ending your piece at m. 26 and adding one final chord at m. 27. Maybe with the violin on C, and the piano spelling C-major (C-E-G).

I'm happy you liked the changes I suggested before, and I like your title "Cats in the Dark." I think that is exactly what this sounds like! If this is your final title, be sure to change it here as well.

Besides that, there are a few notation things I noticed:

1) Please delete the slur/tie in the violin on measure 19, as it does not make sense.

2) Maybe add a slur to the first beat of measure 21 in the violin, since you've slurred the similar groups that immediately follow.

3) You have not added any dynamics yet! At least give the violin and piano a dynamic marking at the very beginning, but feel free to change dynamics in the middle if you'd like.

Please make these changes, but be sure to let me know if you have any questions! I'll get back to you as soon as I can before the deadline.

Best,
Rebecca
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#6 Miranda Bertrand 2017-03-29 09:23
I think I'm finished in your perspective
Sincerely,
Miranda
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#5 Miranda Bertrand 2017-03-29 08:45
Hi Rebecca,
I did what you suggested and it sounded better, thanks,

Sincerely,
Miranda
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#4 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-23 12:32
Hi Miranda,

Thanks for answering my questions!

Here are a few comments to start with:

1) You need to be careful when using double stops (two notes at once played by a string instrument). The performer needs more time to find the double stops, because placing two fingers properly on the strings is more complicated than just the one. Many of the double stops you have written should be playable, but you need to remove the one on the eighth note (and) of beat three in m. 9 and the one on the eighth note (a) of beat three in m. 12.

2) At m. 11, try switching the first beat of the violin with that of the right hand piano. That sounds more melodic to me. See if you like it.

3) At m. 18, you have a tie on the second note of the piano right hand that goes to nothing. Please delete it.

4) Think about articulation in the material you've already written. Which notes do you want to be long vs. short? What about slurs in the violin? Maybe every two sixteenth notes could be slurred? I think that would fit the character of what you've written. Anyways, look over what you have already written and try to add some articulation. I can help you figure out what works and what doesn't.

Since the Opus deadline is in a week, try figuring out an ending. I think the material you have so far works well, but it does not sound like you have an ending yet. One suggestion would be to use similar material to mm.7-8 for an ending.

Good luck, and let me know if you have any questions. I hope to hear from you again soon!

Best,
Rebecca
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#3 Miranda Bertrand 2017-03-21 08:35
Hi Rebecca,
1)The mood I was in was a happy mood, I named the title that because there can always be more people doing everything
2a)Fast/slow
2b)Repeating
I can't think of anything else

Sincerely,
Miranda
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#2 Rebecca Larkin 2017-03-14 22:07
Hi Miranda,

I'm Rebecca and I'll be your mentor for Opus 32.

You've got a lot of good material to start with! I have a couple of questions before we begin:

1) What is your concept for this piece? I'd imagine you have some kind of story or mood in mind, since you've already given it a title.

2) Could you give me five descriptive words for what you want this piece to sound like?

Thanks, and I'm looking forward to hearing back from you!

Best,
Rebecca
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